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Dragon Ball: Saiyan Wars [Official Fan Comic]

Post by Crosshairs007 » Fri Jan 20, 2017 6:09 pm

Hello. This is my fan comic called Dragon Ball: Saiyan Wars. I've been started it since September 2016. It takes place 12 years after Dragon Ball Super; they were enjoying their time of peace on Earth, until a new threat arrives and threatens the universe once again. Will Goku and the others save the Universe.

Chapter 1: New Threat

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Post by FoolsGil » Fri Jan 20, 2017 6:44 pm

Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.

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Post by Gog » Fri Jan 20, 2017 6:50 pm

You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.

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Post by Crosshairs007 » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:09 pm

FoolsGil wrote:Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.
Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?

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Post by Gog » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:20 pm

Crosshairs007 wrote: Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
The art of your comic, I'd like you to get a lot better

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Post by FoolsGil » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:21 pm

Crosshairs007 wrote:
Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
The characters models need work.

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Post by Gog » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:23 pm

FoolsGil wrote:
Crosshairs007 wrote:
Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
The characters models need work.

Also the landscaping, the shading, the backgrounds, also need work

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Post by Crosshairs007 » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:27 pm

Gog wrote:
Crosshairs007 wrote: Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
The art of your comic, I'd like you to get a lot better
I could do just inking like the real manga and I don't have a proper art program right now.

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Post by Gog » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:43 pm

Crosshairs007 wrote:
Gog wrote:
Crosshairs007 wrote: Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
The art of your comic, I'd like you to get a lot better
I could do just inking like the real manga and I don't have a proper art program right now.
Not, just that, but you also need to get better at your character models

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Post by DBZ Macky » Fri Jan 20, 2017 8:44 pm

The art definitely isn't as bad as everyone else is making it sound... at least in my opinion.
I'd say it's pretty awesome except for a few "off-model" panels.

I didn't quite understand the cliffhanger though.
Why is Popo angry, and why is Dende smirking like he is sexually attracted to Gohan?

All in all, I'd definitely like to see more of this.
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Post by Crosshairs007 » Sat Jan 21, 2017 12:57 am

Plus this is my first time doing a comic for real. It will get better as time goes on but I need to learn a few things when drawing DBZ stuff. I didn't know where to start, do you have any recommendations?

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Post by Gog » Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:06 am

Crosshairs007 wrote:Plus this is my first time doing a comic for real. It will get better as time goes on but I need to learn a few things when drawing DBZ stuff. I didn't know where to start, do you have any recommendations?
Make a thread about it, in the fan-created Works. Some body will clear you up, on it. Where all big enough fan's to know this stuff. But some are bigger than the others, as in they know how to make manga.

Probably, maybe, I don't know, just make a thread asking for help, on drawing DBZ stuff

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Post by emperior » Sat Jan 21, 2017 8:42 am

The second Saiyan is badly drawn on that full body panel. Also Dende looks like he is smirking when he, Popo and Gohan sense the Saiyan's Ki.
If you could fix some thing here and there it could actually be good enough.
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Post by sangofe » Sat Jan 21, 2017 1:10 pm

Crosshairs007 wrote:
FoolsGil wrote:Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.
Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
For starters, a fan comic isn't official. Then, there's fan-art that looks a lot better than this... Finally, without having read it, I'd say it's a bad idea to be inspired by the uninspiring Absalon.

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Post by Crosshairs007 » Sat Jan 21, 2017 6:59 pm

sangofe wrote:
Crosshairs007 wrote:
FoolsGil wrote:Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.
Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
For starters, a fan comic isn't official. Then, there's fan-art that looks a lot better than this... Finally, without having read it, I'd say it's a bad idea to be inspired by the uninspiring Absalon.
True that now that I think about it because Absalon's plot is confusing. At the same time, I am not trying to make this next Absalon. This fan comic is going to be like a sequel to Dragon Ball: Super Manga. Shall I wait until Dragon Ball: Super is finished, so that it gives me more time to develop a story and improve the art? P.S. I have other projects besides this, so this going to be a slow release.

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Post by Gog » Sat Jan 21, 2017 7:03 pm

Crosshairs007 wrote:
sangofe wrote:
Crosshairs007 wrote:
Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.



Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
For starters, a fan comic isn't official. Then, there's fan-art that looks a lot better than this... Finally, without having read it, I'd say it's a bad idea to be inspired by the uninspiring Absalon.
True that now that I think about it because Absalon's plot is confusing. At the same time, I am not trying to make this next Absalon. This fan comic is going to be like a sequel to Dragon Ball: Super Manga. Shall I wait until Dragon Ball: Super is finished, so that it gives me more time to develop a story and improve the art? P.S. I have other projects besides this, so this going to be a slow release.
Just make it an alternate story.

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Post by Crosshairs007 » Sat Jan 21, 2017 7:26 pm

Is there anyway that I could talk to you in depth about the plot in private or do I have to post that here?

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Post by Gog » Sat Jan 21, 2017 7:29 pm

Crosshairs007 wrote:Is there anyway that I could talk to you in depth about the plot in private or do I have to post that here?
Just PM us, click the speech bubble beneath the account

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Post by Crosshairs007 » Sun Jan 22, 2017 8:03 pm

Concept art of White Shenron. Note: This is not final, there will be changes

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Re: Dragon Ball: Saiyan Wars [Official Fan Comic]

Post by Crosshairs007 » Tue Oct 03, 2017 1:53 pm

Hello, everybody, it has been a while since the last time I posted something in this forum. I will be doing Q/A for this fan comic series. Post some questions and I will answer them in the next 5 days. As for my question, shall I release the page individually or release the full chapter?

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