Dragon Ball: Saiyan Wars [Official Fan Comic]
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Dragon Ball: Saiyan Wars [Official Fan Comic]
Hello. This is my fan comic called Dragon Ball: Saiyan Wars. I've been started it since September 2016. It takes place 12 years after Dragon Ball Super; they were enjoying their time of peace on Earth, until a new threat arrives and threatens the universe once again. Will Goku and the others save the Universe.
Chapter 1: New Threat
Chapter 1: New Threat
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Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
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You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
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Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.FoolsGil wrote:Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
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The art of your comic, I'd like you to get a lot betterCrosshairs007 wrote: Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
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The characters models need work.Crosshairs007 wrote:Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
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FoolsGil wrote:The characters models need work.Crosshairs007 wrote:Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
Also the landscaping, the shading, the backgrounds, also need work
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I could do just inking like the real manga and I don't have a proper art program right now.Gog wrote:The art of your comic, I'd like you to get a lot betterCrosshairs007 wrote: Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
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Not, just that, but you also need to get better at your character modelsCrosshairs007 wrote:I could do just inking like the real manga and I don't have a proper art program right now.Gog wrote:The art of your comic, I'd like you to get a lot betterCrosshairs007 wrote: Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
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The art definitely isn't as bad as everyone else is making it sound... at least in my opinion.
I'd say it's pretty awesome except for a few "off-model" panels.
I didn't quite understand the cliffhanger though.
Why is Popo angry, and why is Dende smirking like he is sexually attracted to Gohan?
All in all, I'd definitely like to see more of this.
I'd say it's pretty awesome except for a few "off-model" panels.
I didn't quite understand the cliffhanger though.
Why is Popo angry, and why is Dende smirking like he is sexually attracted to Gohan?
All in all, I'd definitely like to see more of this.
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Plus this is my first time doing a comic for real. It will get better as time goes on but I need to learn a few things when drawing DBZ stuff. I didn't know where to start, do you have any recommendations?
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Make a thread about it, in the fan-created Works. Some body will clear you up, on it. Where all big enough fan's to know this stuff. But some are bigger than the others, as in they know how to make manga.Crosshairs007 wrote:Plus this is my first time doing a comic for real. It will get better as time goes on but I need to learn a few things when drawing DBZ stuff. I didn't know where to start, do you have any recommendations?
Probably, maybe, I don't know, just make a thread asking for help, on drawing DBZ stuff
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The second Saiyan is badly drawn on that full body panel. Also Dende looks like he is smirking when he, Popo and Gohan sense the Saiyan's Ki.
If you could fix some thing here and there it could actually be good enough.
If you could fix some thing here and there it could actually be good enough.
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What I consider canonical
What I consider canonical
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For starters, a fan comic isn't official. Then, there's fan-art that looks a lot better than this... Finally, without having read it, I'd say it's a bad idea to be inspired by the uninspiring Absalon.Crosshairs007 wrote:Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.FoolsGil wrote:Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
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True that now that I think about it because Absalon's plot is confusing. At the same time, I am not trying to make this next Absalon. This fan comic is going to be like a sequel to Dragon Ball: Super Manga. Shall I wait until Dragon Ball: Super is finished, so that it gives me more time to develop a story and improve the art? P.S. I have other projects besides this, so this going to be a slow release.sangofe wrote:For starters, a fan comic isn't official. Then, there's fan-art that looks a lot better than this... Finally, without having read it, I'd say it's a bad idea to be inspired by the uninspiring Absalon.Crosshairs007 wrote:Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.FoolsGil wrote:Gonna be honest, reminds me of Absalon.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?Gog wrote:You should improve your art, before you go making a douishin.
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Just make it an alternate story.Crosshairs007 wrote:True that now that I think about it because Absalon's plot is confusing. At the same time, I am not trying to make this next Absalon. This fan comic is going to be like a sequel to Dragon Ball: Super Manga. Shall I wait until Dragon Ball: Super is finished, so that it gives me more time to develop a story and improve the art? P.S. I have other projects besides this, so this going to be a slow release.sangofe wrote:For starters, a fan comic isn't official. Then, there's fan-art that looks a lot better than this... Finally, without having read it, I'd say it's a bad idea to be inspired by the uninspiring Absalon.Crosshairs007 wrote:
Tbh, for this arc, it was inspired by Absalon.
Which one do you mean, if you don't mind me asking?
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Is there anyway that I could talk to you in depth about the plot in private or do I have to post that here?
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Just PM us, click the speech bubble beneath the accountCrosshairs007 wrote:Is there anyway that I could talk to you in depth about the plot in private or do I have to post that here?
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Concept art of White Shenron. Note: This is not final, there will be changes
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Hello, everybody, it has been a while since the last time I posted something in this forum. I will be doing Q/A for this fan comic series. Post some questions and I will answer them in the next 5 days. As for my question, shall I release the page individually or release the full chapter?
Thank you,
Crosshairs007
Thank you,
Crosshairs007