TonyTheTiger wrote:Sure there is. Focus alternating panels on her hands in between wide shots. Shade her blasts differently and depict an increasing number of her shots in the wide angles. 2-3 pages tops. In fact, doing that would have been better to demonstrate what she's doing anyway. Having other characters narrate her strategy violates show don't tell. If not for Uub we'd have no idea what was happening.
Yeah, I agree with that sentiment and I think you said it better than I did.
When I was talking about the time spent on this, I wasn't talking about the comic's release schedule at all - I know that's the common excuse for any criticism directed at the comic, but just in terms of the number of pages used I think this is quite poorly executed and the end result is quite boring.
Kamiccolo9 wrote:Oh, don't worry. I actually think it's even worse with Salagir, given that abysmally stupid release schedule. That just compounds any pacing problem.
I agree that Salagir is worse about it, but not for that reason. I think it's worse because his commentary sounds much less natural than Toriyama's, to the extent that the characters stop sounding like themselves when he uses them for exposition.
An example would be Piccolo's comments on Cold's strength. He's too damn specific compared to how Toriyama would have someone make those comparisons, and he goes as far as to have Piccolo actually use the phrase "Perfect Cell" as if he were in a fan debate.
He manages to make it sound more unnatural than when Freeza is putting his power into pure mathematical terms!
