Cold World

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Sat Oct 29, 2011 11:48 am

New chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/13/Cold_World

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Wed Nov 02, 2011 12:07 pm

This chapter's pretty big:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/14/Cold_World

funrush · Post by **funrush** » Wed Nov 02, 2011 9:11 pm

Okay, I started to fall behind. Gonna read these tomorrow.

BlazingFiddlesticks · Post by **BlazingFiddlesticks** » Thu Nov 03, 2011 11:02 pm

So I speed through the first twelve chapters, and now I'm here having finished fourteen. I'm quite impressed. You didn't make Radditz completely useless, you did some pretty plausible theorizing of what would have happened on Earth should the Saiyan saga have never happened, Gohan's smarmy analysis of people simpler than himself turns plausible to annoyance with said people, and to answer one of your original questions; you've got the Freeza formula down as far as I can tell. A lashing + heated solitary confinement would have struck me as a bit dark for Dragon Ball out of the blue but... not here.

funrush · Post by **funrush** » Fri Nov 04, 2011 6:41 am

Just read the last two chapters, who've thought S=Avocado would've been killed by the Makankosappo.

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Sat Nov 05, 2011 12:07 pm

New chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/15/Cold_World

This one is weird, as I adapted a lot of scenes from the series to it, so apologies if it comes off as a tad lazy and derivative.

funrush · Post by **funrush** » Sat Nov 05, 2011 4:37 pm

Loved it, except for the line about Piccolo dying during the invasion. For some reason, I don't like that. The shower scene was pretty hilarious. I did, however, wonder that, if the Saiyans, that had power levels of 20,000 were stronger than Kaio, who is stronger than Enma, how did Enma defeat both Avo and Cado?

dbgtFO · Post by **dbgtFO** » Sat Nov 05, 2011 5:35 pm

funrush wrote:Loved it, except for the line about Piccolo dying during the invasion. For some reason, I don't like that. The shower scene was pretty hilarious. I did, however, wonder that, if the Saiyans, that had power levels of 20,000 were stronger than Kaio, who is stronger than Enma, how did Enma defeat both Avo and Cado?

They probably didn't have any bodies like all other bad guys and average people.

coola · Post by **coola** » Sun Nov 06, 2011 11:30 am

Nice chapter, and dialogue from manga/anime fit very nicely, it was little weird at first, to see Dr. Gero asking Piccolo to allow him to turn him into Android, rather than just kidnap him, but i guess he didnt have technology to do so.

funrush · Post by **funrush** » Sun Nov 06, 2011 1:22 pm

Yeah, I can see that this will be a universe where the Androids are weaker.

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Sun Nov 06, 2011 1:54 pm

Well, the Androids won't be around at all in this fic. That was why I did the flashback - to explain why the planet was still in one piece, and to offset any possibilities of the Androids showing up. The two humans Piccolo saved were Androids 17 and 18 prior to being converted, when they were both just average teenagers.

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Mon Nov 07, 2011 12:41 pm

New Chapter: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/16/

I haven't really proofread it, so apologies in advanced for any nasty grammatical errors.

Here's a pretty half-assed rendering of how Gohan will look in the incoming fight with Frieza. I didn't make the original image, I just recolored it (poorly):

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Wed Nov 09, 2011 1:40 pm

New chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/17/Cold_World

funrush · Post by **funrush** » Wed Nov 09, 2011 6:06 pm

Okay, so Trunks happened, Vegeta and Gohan are in the Rosat, Goku and friends will be fighting Freeza's henchmen. I have a question, what happened to Raditz and Nappa? Executed?

BlazingFiddlesticks · Post by **BlazingFiddlesticks** » Wed Nov 09, 2011 8:21 pm

And dynamite has been lit. Looking forward to this.

Also, interesting, but not surprising, that Trunks happened. You orchestrated it about as plausibly as possible, I think.

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Wed Nov 09, 2011 9:07 pm

funrush wrote:Okay, so Trunks happened, Vegeta and Gohan are in the Rosat, Goku and friends will be fighting Freeza's henchmen. I have a question, what happened to Raditz and Nappa? Executed?

Yeah, they're dead.

The next chapter's gonna be fun. Ginyu Force douchebaggery is lying ahead!

jjgp1112 · Post by **jjgp1112** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 9:28 pm

New Chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/18/

This one was a ton of fun.

Gokuman1993 · Post by **Gokuman1993** » Sun Nov 13, 2011 11:04 pm

jjgp1112 wrote:New Chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/18/

This one was a ton of fun.

All right! I just read it and it was awesome! Goku's now a false SS... i mean....CHAMPION CHRISTMAS!

BlazingFiddlesticks · Post by **BlazingFiddlesticks** » Mon Nov 14, 2011 12:33 am

Gokuman1993 wrote:
jjgp1112 wrote:New Chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/18/

This one was a ton of fun.
All right! I just read it and it was awesome! Goku's now a false SS... i mean....CHAMPION CHRISTMAS!

Spoilers, dang it all! (Not really you're fault, I just came into the topic to find a new chapter and comment)

EDIT: Good idea playing on Recoome's being the dumb tank.

funrush · Post by **funrush** » Mon Nov 14, 2011 5:46 pm

Can't wait for Freeza's transformation.

Freeza: Well, my power now is over one million!
Vegeta and Gohan: Shit.

Kanzenshuu

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