Fanfiction - "Dragon Ball Universe"

[Anime Kitten]

Don't worry, Gohan will show his power in time. Actually, Chapter 4 will center around him (with Pan). So look forward to that.

[Anime Kitten]

#13 released.

Thoughts? Anyone? I know I'm getting readers here...

[LeanMeanFatReducin]

Everything from the beginning up until the introduction of Dawn feels like an appetizer and that we're only starting to nibble on the edges of something big you have planned. The idea of Cell as a swarm of spider-like murder bots is very interesting, maybe you could have done something more with that ? The Freeza arc was very well done because it was not overdone. The fight looks like it lasted only like, what, erhm... 5 minutes ? Hahah nevertheless, it created the precedent for the fighters to kick it up a notch on their training and fight discipline. Fine with me i'd say, let's leave the evil tyrant alone, he's rather tuckered out by now I assume. Although I feel we're not yet done with him...

You changed the relationships - Pan being Vegeta's daughter, this is gonna be fun down the line unless this is just for the sake of novelty.

Piccolo being addressed as Big Green brought a smile to my face. The Ginyu and Squadron interactions were in the same spirit and that's what this fanfic needs more of - moments of levity. Sprinkle 'em I'd say.

[Anime Kitten]

Thanks a lot for the thoughts! Yes, #1-#11 were just the introductions to the characters; getting to know them. The meat of the story is just starting. Also, you reminded me to do this, so #14 is now released.

[Anime Kitten]

A bit of news:
First, I am no longer keeping to a weekly schedule.
Second, Episodes are now called Parts.
Third, new thread title.

That's all. As always, opinions and thoughts are appreciated.

[Gog]

Hmmm, read the first chapter, and can you draw, because I think this story would work better as a manga

[Anime Kitten]

Hmmm, read the first chapter, and can you draw, because I think this story would work better as a manga

Well, I have some (I think) above average skills, and I have considered a comic/manga parallel to the fic, but I'm not sure my ability is suited for the task. The first Chapter (not Part) involving the Cells would especially prove troublesome.