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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Xyex » Sat Jun 12, 2010 1:32 am

Zionist wrote:That's a pretty bad looking Broly, even though Broly can't look that great to begin with and how the hell does he know Trunks? Let alone his name. Surely Mirai Trunks and Present Trunks's energy can't be identical. PLOT HOLE!
Why wouldn't their energy be identical? I'm not talking power level, I'm talking the 'feel' of it. That's how they recognize who is who by their ki. Not the strength but the feel, as noted with Cell feeling like everyone. Trunks is Trunks is Trunks is Trunks, no matter what era you are in. He's still Trunks.
Scarz wrote:But why does he sense Goku? Goku and Goten are two different people and they don't share the same energy level (or is it power level?), they just look the same.
Goten is a Goku clone, so I wouldn't be the least bit surprised if his ki felt almost the same, too.
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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by rereboy » Sat Jun 12, 2010 5:39 am

Xyex wrote: No one has found a single plot hole. Not one. People just want an excuse to bitch, so they start bitching without thinking, and then just make themselves look like idiots. It's been a common theme in this thread as of late. :?
Not really. I`ve always defended this fan manga and I have many times called out on people when they are clearly exaggerating.

But this page is too wrong to not criticize it:

a) In the situation that Brolly was in he should have drown. There is nothing to suggest that he just got to the ocean immediately before the tsunami hit him and if that is the case, besides being awfully convenient (too convenient), then its very poorly explained in the page because that`s not we logically interpret from it. What we interpret from the page is that he was unconscious in the ocean, face down, for some time, before Trunks awoke him.

b) Brolly shouldn`t be able to feel Ki and recognize it. He is nowhere near the level of genius that Vegeta is to learn it just after one confrontation with Goku and the others.

c) Goten`s Ki shouldn`t feel like Goku`s. They are very different persons with very distinct personalities and very different power levels. Just because they look similar in appearance, that doesn`t mean that their Ki should feel the same. At most, Goten`s Ki shouldn`t resemble Goku`s Ki any more than Gohan`s does.

Basically the writing of this page seems much more like any other average Fan Fiction. It is clearly inferior to the one of the main story. And that disappoints me. So far, they are not doing a better job than Movie 10 did. And if they fail to improve it, then this special is clearly not worth anybody`s time. We would be much better off if they just made a different ending for the retelling of Movie 8 in which Brolly won in Universe 20, going on a universal rampage, before getting inside that ice at the end. In the other universes Brolly would just die with the Genki Dama.

And I`m not even questioning why Brolly is the ocean because I`m assuming that will still be explained.

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Xyex » Sat Jun 12, 2010 6:18 am

rereboy wrote:a) In the situation that Brolly was in he should have drown. There is nothing to suggest that he just got to the ocean immediately before the tsunami hit him and if that is the case, besides being awfully convenient (too convenient), then its very poorly explained in the page because that`s not we logically interpret from it. What we interpret from the page is that he was unconscious in the ocean, face down, for some time, before Trunks awoke him.
There is nothing to indicate or suggest that he's been in the ocean for a long time, nor to suggest that he wasn't floating face up for the majority of the time (people can, do, and will float face up when unconscious). And no, what we interpret from the page is that Brolly was in the water, unconscious, and the shockwave/tidalwave from Trunks's blast woke him. There's nothing to say he was floating face down in the water for any length of time prior to this. What's more, Vegetto's currently holding his breath in deep space in the main story, and has been for several minutes. Even if Brolly had been face down in the water for the last ten or fifteen minutes I seriously doubt it'd be a breathing issue.
rereboy wrote:b) Brolly shouldn`t be able to feel Ki and recognize it. He is nowhere near the level of genius that Vegeta is to learn it just after one confrontation with Goku and the others.
There's nothing 'genius' about it. Goku just got it after drinking some special water. Vegeta just got it because he was told it was possible. Saiya-jins just get things. It's what they do. It's what they've been doing since Goku copied the Kamehameha in 5 seconds. There's no intelligence required, it's instinctual for them.

And correct me if I'm wrong, as it's been a long time since I've seen it, but Brolly seemed perfectly capable of sensing ki in movie 10, upon which this is based.
rereboy wrote:c) Goten`s Ki shouldn`t feel like Goku`s. They are very different persons with very distinct personalities and very different power levels. Just because they look similar in appearance, that doesn`t mean that their Ki should feel the same. At most, Goten`s Ki shouldn`t resemble Goku`s Ki any more than Gohan`s does.
As I've said before, you power level has jack shit to do with how your ki feels. It's completely unrelated and unimportant. This is exemplified in Cell, who exhibits multiple signatures that everyone uniquely identifies to those who have 'contributed' DNA to him. Considering we have absolutely no fucking idea what this 'feel' is that they use to identify each other there's no reason to think that if Goten can LOOK exactly like Goku that he can't also FEEL exactly like Goku. Goku and Goten are very different people with very distinct personalities and very different power levels, but they look nearly physically identical. Kids can look like practical clones of their father's but it's impossible for them to FEEL like clones, too? How the hell does that make any sense?
rereboy wrote:Basically the writing of this page seems much more like any other average Fan Fiction. It is clearly inferior to the one of the main story. And that disappoints me. So far, they are not doing a better job than Movie 10 did. And if they fail to improve it, then this special is clearly not worth anybody`s time. We would be much better off if they just made a different ending for the retelling of Movie 8 in which Brolly won in Universe 20, going on a universal rampage, before getting inside that ice at the end. In the other universes Brolly would just die with the Genki Dama.
You know, I find it amusing how people keep deriding the narrative content of the specials, while praising DBM's writing, and completely ignoring the fact that Salagir is responsible for all of the stories. He gives the special chapter artists the stories, they draw them and plop in the narrative provided.

So yes, every single complaint you mentioned is just exaggeration made so that people can bitch about nothing. And it's getting REALLY old.
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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by rereboy » Sat Jun 12, 2010 8:47 am

Xyex wrote: There is nothing to indicate or suggest that he's been in the ocean for a long time, nor to suggest that he wasn't floating face up for the majority of the time (people can, do, and will float face up when unconscious). And no, what we interpret from the page is that Brolly was in the water, unconscious, and the shockwave/tidalwave from Trunks's blast woke him. There's nothing to say he was floating face down in the water for any length of time prior to this. What's more, Vegetto's currently holding his breath in deep space in the main story, and has been for several minutes. Even if Brolly had been face down in the water for the last ten or fifteen minutes I seriously doubt it'd be a breathing issue.
When someone is unconscious, its impossible to hold the breath. Holding the breath is a conscious decision. Someone unconscious just lets the air go out of the lungs and if its impossible to breath in, the person either wakes up and reaches for air or suffocates. So, I admit that he can be in space as long as he can hold his breath and he might not even need it in LSSJ, but when he is unconscious (and out of LSSJ) that is impossible.
On this page he is unconscious, face down, before he wakes up. Since its impossible for him to breathe in that position, since he can`s hold his breath while unconscious, and since he didn`t wake up when his face became submerged (only when the tsunami hit), he should have suffocated.
At the very least the page is poorly explained. There is no point in trying to deny it.
And correct me if I'm wrong, as it's been a long time since I've seen it, but Brolly seemed perfectly capable of sensing ki in movie 10, upon which this is based.
He did? Well, its been a long time, I don`t remember. I still don`t agree that he should be able to, but if the movie is like that, then they didn`t make that part worse. So, I`ll concede that point.
As I've said before, you power level has jack shit to do with how your ki feels. It's completely unrelated and unimportant. This is exemplified in Cell, who exhibits multiple signatures that everyone uniquely identifies to those who have 'contributed' DNA to him. Considering we have absolutely no fucking idea what this 'feel' is that they use to identify each other there's no reason to think that if Goten can LOOK exactly like Goku that he can't also FEEL exactly like Goku. Goku and Goten are very different people with very distinct personalities and very different power levels, but they look nearly physically identical. Kids can look like practical clones of their father's but it's impossible for them to FEEL like clones, too? How the hell does that make any sense?
Simply because Ki consists heavily on spiritual energy as well as physical. The soul, in other words and the body. Its not just physical appearance. Saying that Goten feels just like Goku makes as much sense to me as saying that Tullece fells exactly like Goku.

If Goten`s ki has some familiarity with Goku`s Ki is simply because he is his son. But that being the case, the Ki shouldn`t be more similar to Goku`s than Gohan`s.

But I`ll concede this point too, because it actually doesn`t bother much at all. Its possible that Brolly just hasn`t mastered fully his ki sensing abilities, but that could also be better explained in the page.
You know, I find it amusing how people keep deriding the narrative content of the specials, while praising DBM's writing, and completely ignoring the fact that Salagir is responsible for all of the stories. He gives the special chapter artists the stories, they draw them and plop in the narrative provided.

So yes, every single complaint you mentioned is just exaggeration made so that people can bitch about nothing. And it's getting REALLY old.
I`m perfectly aware that Salagir is responsible for the stories of these specials. So? The same author can`t do a better job in one place and a job not as good on another place?

It has nothing to do with who does them. Nothing at all. It only has to do with the story.

Now, you should just relax and calm down. You are not being fair to me since this is actually the first time that I`ve complained about DBM, unlike most. And so, I think I`ve earned the right to complain if I think that something could be better.

I still think this is by far the best fan manga out there. And there is very little wrong with it. But this page could have been better since the story of Movie 10 that reflects this part is actually more convincing (because it included a space ship and it didn`t include Brolly unconscious, face down, in the water. The Ki sensing and confusing Goten for Goku because of his Ki actually doesn`t bother me as much as that).

In short, what I`m trying to say is that this page is really, really far from the best I`ve seen in this manga.

But, like I said, I love this manga :mrgreen:. Don`t get me wrong on that.

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Maphisto86 » Sat Jun 12, 2010 7:47 pm

I gotta say I too was surprised by the abrupt introduction of Brocolli head. Not to mention the fact that a lack of oxygen to the brain apparentley makes him smarter. :roll: :wink: All well now that he is introduced, the sooner this special can get to the point.

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Post by Booney » Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:03 pm

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He must be the luckiest guy in the multiverse!
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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Metalwario64 » Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:05 pm

Wait, the comet just went through him? Screw Ghost Nappa, Ghost Broly is where it's at! :lol: I also find the idea of him trying to stand up for six years to be quite humorous. :lol:
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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Zionist » Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:07 pm

6 years with no food or water awake or unconscious, i don't care what universe your in you will die. Salagir doesn't explain sh** anymore. What is this trash that he's letting on his Comic?
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Post by coola » Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:14 pm

Thank you for warn us earlier,DNA,i was able to prepare myself.
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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Freeza Heika » Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:23 pm

Hey, you got wankery in my story!
Well you got story in my wankery!


And it tastes like shit! :D

Seriously people, wtf?!
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Post by The Tori-bot » Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:24 pm

I don't know why they don't get a native English speaker to proofread the translation. It seems to have gotten even worse as of late.
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Post by .:PoetikaL:. » Sun Jun 13, 2010 4:31 pm

Weak translation for a weak side story.
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Post by Piccolo Daimaoh » Sun Jun 13, 2010 9:14 pm

What a really inappropriate time to cut to stupid Broly backstory.

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Maphisto86 » Sun Jun 13, 2010 10:20 pm

Booney wrote:*Cut lame idea in comic backstory*
He must be the luckiest guy in the multiverse!
Damn.
Really Salagir? :| :roll:

Well it is no less unrealistic an idea then the common cliche of having someone suspened in frozen ice for years and surviving just fine when released. All and all though, I can't say I am enthralled by the latest page. *shrug*

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Dayspring » Mon Jun 14, 2010 12:37 am

What a horrible translation. The comet passed by, not through him, and only damaged the surface. He then spends the next six years refocusing his strength so that he could go after his sworn enemy. When he became strong enough, he sensed where the nearest powers were, then used that strength to fly towards it. The lack of air makes him pass out.

So basically the only real change is that New Vegeta never blew up and that the nearest habitable planet to it was Earth. Which isn't all that unlikely considering it only takes a few minutes or hours to get to New Vegeta in the first place. The only unbelievable part was that Broly was fine instead of hacking up water when he woke up.

All they did was make it more belieavable than what we already saw in movie 8.

EDIT: So he doesn't "just know" how to sense ki, either. He spent 6 years focusing his own, and stumbled onto how to detect ki forces. Albeit, this makes the "Kakarotto and Trunks' ki" sensing ridiculous.
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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by TonyTheTiger » Mon Jun 14, 2010 3:26 am

This is like those ghost movies like The Ring or something where the bad guy's powers are completely ill-defined and pretty much operate on perpetual deus ex machina, doing whatever the story requires at the time.

This is much, much more unbelievable than an encased in ice plot device simply because it's far more detailed. "Encased in ice" is quick and to the point so it's easy to just do a hand wave and move on. Here we're basically being told straight up "he can do this just because." "He can do that just because." "Oh, did we mention he can do this, too, just because?" It actually would make a great parody if it weren't being written with deadpan seriousness. Movie 10 had a stupid reason Broly survived, sure, but the writers apparently knew it was stupid so didn't dwell on it enough to make it much of a bother. Here we're getting a shopping list of every little detail.

And I don't know about anybody else but I'm just generally less tolerant of these interludes. I don't have much interest in modified versions of the movies when what I really want to see is more turtle hermit Krillin and evil Kakarot and Co. Even if these retellings are good (which so far this one isn't so hot) they're still taking me away from the actual plot I find most interesting. So I find that in itself annoying.

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by Zephyr » Mon Jun 14, 2010 4:13 am

The only reason they would include a Broly backstory at this point in the story is because Broly is still going to be a character that the story is focusing on. So even after this flashback there will still be plenty of Broly wanking.

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by rereboy » Mon Jun 14, 2010 4:36 am

Dayspring wrote:What a horrible translation. The comet passed by, not through him, and only damaged the surface.
?? :?:

In the french page it says "La comète avait traversé Brolly, puis détruit la surface de la Planète."

I think this translates to something like: "The comet had crossed Brolly, then it destroyed the surface of the planet".

Not sure where you got the only damaged part... But I could be wrong.

Also the part about powers, it only talks about powers, not nearest powers. I also don`t know where you got that "nearest" from.

The english translation of the page is not far off at all although I would change the best enemy to sworn enemy and went through to crossed.

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Post by Senzu_Bean » Mon Jun 14, 2010 5:54 am

Except the comet was supposed to have been destroyed, going by the last chapter.

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Re: Fanmanga - DB Multiverse

Post by rereboy » Mon Jun 14, 2010 6:05 am

I`m talking about translation.

The aim of a good translation is to accurately and precisely transcribe to another language what is being said in one language.

The fact that the comet was destroyed or not is not a problem of the translation.

As such, I think that the english translation of the page in not far at all from the original.

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