Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
I offer to write Scene 10, starting off.
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Cool. I'll keep a list of who's claimed what so farFoolsGil wrote:I offer to write Scene 10, starting off.
Scene 1
Scene 2: Written by FoolsGil
Scene 3: Written by FoolsGil
Scene 4: Written by me
Scene 5: Written by FoolsGil
Scene 6: Written by FoolsGil
Scene 7: Written by me
Scene 8: Claimed by FoolsGil
Scene 9: Claimed by me:
Scene 10: Written by FoolsGil
Scene 11: Written by me
Scene 12
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
I'm not the best story writer in terms of overall plot (ask my friends when we did my Star Wars RPG. It sucked). I'm more of a character builder and can give the motivation of said characters.
Sorry.
Sorry.
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
That's fineShadowBardock89 wrote:I'm not the best story writer in terms of overall plot (ask my friends when we did my Star Wars RPG. It sucked). I'm more of a character builder and can give the motivation of said characters.
Sorry.
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
"Wow, that thing's pretty big," Goten said as he walked through the gateway to the tournament world, and saw the arena. He'd exchanged his old gi for one based on the one his father had worn in his latest batttle with Freeza- Several of the fighters have arrived, and others are arriving through a portal. The T1 characters (minus Goku) arrive and are greeted by Whis. Whis asks whose fighting. Vegeta, Piccolo, Gohan, Goten, and Trunks step forward, but Whis says there's only four fighters allowed from each universe, so Goten and Trunks say they'll fuse and compete as Gotenks. Whis gives the fighters each a bandanna with the number of their universe on it.
-Goku notes that Gohan is dressed as Saiyaman, and Gohan nervously replies that he still can't find his Gi. Piccolo narrows his eyes, and thinks to himself that there's more to it than that.
-Chichi and the Ox King, present as Spectators, look around. Ox King points someone out of the crowd. The group is surprised to see An elderly looking Goku dressed in Saiyan clothes.
"Yeah, I wonder how many people can fit inside?" Trunks asked. Like Goten, he was wearing a new outfit, but his was based on his father's old Saiyan armor.
"Don't concern yourself with pointless matters," Vegeta chided his son, "Stay focused on the fights to come."
"Lighten up Vegeta, let the kids have a little fun," Gohan said, dressed in the same version of the Saiyaman outfit he'd worn to the World Martial Arts Tournament.
"It's that sort of attitude that will guarantee your loss," Vegeta retorted.
"Don't count him out yet," Piccolo butted in, "Me and Gohan have been training together since the last time Freeza attacked. You shouldn't underestimate us."
"Hey guys!" came the exuberant shout of Goku as he ran up to the group, Whis walking closely behind.
Goten met his father with a hug, prompting a warm smile from Gohan.
"This is a fairly large group," Whis observed, "Who shall compete in the tournament?"
Vegeta, Gohan, Piccolo, Trunks, and Goten stepped forward.
"Oh, I'm sorry, but only 4 fighter per universe may participate," Whis informed them.
"Dang it!" Trunks said, before turning to Goten, "So, which of us gets the spot?"
"I know, we'll Rock Paper Scissors for it!" Goten said with his ever present grin.
As the two began to play, and tie repeatedly, Goku said to Whis "You know, they're pretty young. Why don't I just take that spot?"
Vegeta immediately appeared by Goku's side, and smacked him on the back of the skull.
"Don't steal my son's spot you jackass!"
"Aw, but Vegeta, he might not even win the spot!" Goku complained, only for Chichi to grab his ear and shout into it,
"What about your son then? Are you just gonna steal his spot?"
"I'm sorry Goku, but I'm afraid Lord Beerus would be very displeased if I were to let you compete."
"Darn it..." Goku said dejectedly.
"All this noise is giving me a headache," Piccolo groused, "So in the interest of shutting some of it up I'll make a suggestion: The kids can fuse and compete as Gotenks."
"That's a great idea Mr. Piccolo!" Goten cheered.
"Whatever, fine by me," Trunks said, trying to look cool and disinterested.
Whis snapped a finger, and headbands materialized on Gohan, Piccolo, and Vegeta's heads. An extra large one appeared around both Goten and Trunks' heads, connecting them together. The number one was written on all of them.
"Beerus insisted that your timeline be Timeline 1, so I saved that one for when you got here," Whis explained, "Now if you'll excuse me I must get back to the gateway. The doors to the arena will open once everyone has arrived. In the meantime you can mingle out here. I understand some of the other spectators have set up food stalls nearby."
"Really? Awesome!" Goten shouted, over Trunks complaints, "Let's go get some dad!"
"Sure thing!" Goku said, picking up Goten and Trunks and running off with them on his shoulders.
"I'll go along with them, make sure they don't get into to much trouble," Gohan said to the others before running off after them.
As they ran, Goku said to Gohan, "By the way, why are you wearing that?"
Gohan rubbed the back of his head "Oh, I just still can't find my gi."
Bakc with the group, Piccolo's eyes narrowed.
'You're deceiving your father, Gohan?'
Meanwhile, the group began to disperse through the crowd.
"There are so many familiar faces here," Chichi commented, as she looked around
"That's right honey," her father said, before catching sight of something, "Look over there Chichi."
Chichi looked to where her father was pointing, and saw an elderly man wearing a headband with '3' printed on it. But what caught her attention was that...
"He looks almost exactly like Goku!" she exclaimed, "A bit older, and the mustache is new, but they've gotta be related!"
"He's wearing Saiyan armor...Do you think that could be Goku's father?" The Ox King speculated.
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Scene 10:
I'll start on scene 5.
Spoiler:
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Nice work!
I think we're on the same wavelength, you put in a lot of details i Myself had thought of but not shared, like frieza being dead or the purple gi.
(Incidently, Frieza's death figures into my plan for the Kold vs. Bebi match)
I think we're on the same wavelength, you put in a lot of details i Myself had thought of but not shared, like frieza being dead or the purple gi.
(Incidently, Frieza's death figures into my plan for the Kold vs. Bebi match)
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
BTW FoolsGil, if you need to know any background details for the characters in Scene 5, just ask and i'll fill you in.
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Please do so. I assumed Goku and Vegeta are dead.jcogginsa wrote:BTW FoolsGil, if you need to know any background details for the characters in Scene 5, just ask and i'll fill you in.
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FoolsGil wrote:Please do so. I assumed Goku and Vegeta are dead.jcogginsa wrote:BTW FoolsGil, if you need to know any background details for the characters in Scene 5, just ask and i'll fill you in.
Spoiler:
If you have any other questions let me know
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Scene 5
Spoiler:
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Very nice.
I only recomend one thing.
I think it might be better if Gine said "It's nice to know that in some timelines, Kakarot grew up strong," instead of “It is nice to know that in some timelines, Kakarot did not grow up to be a failure."
I just think it fits her a little better.
In other news, i'll be claiming Scene 7
I only recomend one thing.
I think it might be better if Gine said "It's nice to know that in some timelines, Kakarot grew up strong," instead of “It is nice to know that in some timelines, Kakarot did not grow up to be a failure."
I just think it fits her a little better.
In other news, i'll be claiming Scene 7
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
It's changed.
Since they're so tiny, I'll take scene two and three
Since they're so tiny, I'll take scene two and three
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Can you add in Scene 5 this:
"Even though the blue one was physically imposing and was nearly as tall as Nappa once was, they could sense the red one was suppressing his power."
"Even though the blue one was physically imposing and was nearly as tall as Nappa once was, they could sense the red one was suppressing his power."
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
I'm not sure how to place that sentence in there without it sounding weird.. If you rewrite that portion of the paragraph with the sentence you want in, I'll change it.ShadowBardock89 wrote:Can you add in Scene 5 this:
"Even though the blue one was physically imposing and was nearly as tall as Nappa once was, they could sense the red one was suppressing his power."
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
FoolsGil wrote:Scene 5
Spoiler:
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
And it has been changed. Thank you.
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Scene Two and Three
Spoiler:
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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Excellent...though, there is one issue.
The world is supposed to be barren because the Androids killed everyone (And The Supreme Kai forgot to check for Android life on the planet)
That's why they show up later and try to start a fight
The world is supposed to be barren because the Androids killed everyone (And The Supreme Kai forgot to check for Android life on the planet)
That's why they show up later and try to start a fight
Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)
Fix'd. I just figured those extra Androids were spectators from elsewhere.jcogginsa wrote:Excellent...though, there is one issue.
The world is supposed to be barren because the Androids killed everyone (And The Supreme Kai forgot to check for Android life on the planet)
That's why they show up later and try to start a fight

