Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)

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Post by jcogginsa » Tue Jan 19, 2016 8:08 pm

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jcogginsa wrote:Excellent...though, there is one issue.

The world is supposed to be barren because the Androids killed everyone (And The Supreme Kai forgot to check for Android life on the planet)

That's why they show up later and try to start a fight
Fix'd. I just figured those extra Androids were spectators from elsewhere.
Sorry for not making that clear.

Here's my current plan for those androids

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Post by jcogginsa » Fri Jan 22, 2016 2:15 pm

-On a nearby ridge, another version of Androids 17 and 18 are watching the people gather. As it turns out, this is an earth where they wiped everyone out. The Supreme Kai of Time had forgotten to search for androids on this earth, and thought it was abandoned.

- 17 and 18 talk about seeing familiar faces in the crowd. 18 wonders if "That creepy bug guy" is there and 17 says that if he is they'll just kill him again.

-They continue watching, and 17 notices Dr. Gero. He points Gero out to 18 and 18 says she know who they'll kill first.

- 17 and 18 rush in to kill Gero. T6 17 and T6 18 invervene and knock the two homicidal androids out in a single blow.
Scene 7

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Post by FoolsGil » Fri Jan 22, 2016 8:57 pm

I'll tackle scene 6

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Post by jcogginsa » Sun Jan 24, 2016 2:09 am

I think i'll take Scene 11

I wonder: Should Vegeta have the stache?

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Post by ShadowBardock89 » Sun Jan 24, 2016 9:37 am

Yes, it'll differentiate the two Vegetas.
http://www.kanzenshuu.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=40715&start=20#p1439892
http://dba.bn-ent.net/character/barduck.html
https://i.imgur.com/86hOk5i.gif

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Post by jcogginsa » Fri Jan 29, 2016 1:12 am

Haven't found the time to work on the scene, been busy at school.

Mean time, have some background on Timeline 10. This is a list of the major villains after the divergence, and who defeated them

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Post by FoolsGil » Fri Jan 29, 2016 8:55 am

jcogginsa wrote:Haven't found the time to work on the scene, been busy at school.

Mean time, have some background on Timeline 10. This is a list of the major villains after the divergence, and who defeated them
Okay. I want to add a couple things. I really would like this series to go against the grain for U10. The name of the game is subversion. Everything that the reader expects from an all human universe, they don't get.
And here are some story ideas for U10.

As for scene 6, I'll have that up today.
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Post by jcogginsa » Fri Jan 29, 2016 11:38 am

FoolsGil wrote:
jcogginsa wrote:Haven't found the time to work on the scene, been busy at school.

Mean time, have some background on Timeline 10. This is a list of the major villains after the divergence, and who defeated them
Okay. I want to add a couple things. I really would like this series to go against the grain for U10. The name of the game is subversion. Everything that the reader expects from an all human universe, they don't get.
And here are some story ideas for U10.

As for U6, I'll have that up today.
Very interesting thoughts

Techniques
story

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Post by FoolsGil » Fri Jan 29, 2016 3:26 pm

jcogginsa wrote:
jcogginsa wrote: For the sayians

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Post by jcogginsa » Fri Jan 29, 2016 6:34 pm

FoolsGil wrote:

For the techniques

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Post by FoolsGil » Fri Jan 29, 2016 11:21 pm

Scene 6

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Post by jcogginsa » Fri Jan 29, 2016 11:29 pm

Looks good, not entirely what i was expecting, but not bad.

There are a couple cases of missing punctuation though

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Post by FoolsGil » Sat Jan 30, 2016 12:18 am

jcogginsa wrote: Never mind, I misread the Enlightenment thing. I thought it meant Roshi could defeat final form Freeza as soon as he achieved it. I realize that's wrong now.
I'm glad you reconsidered. We can hash out limitations or whatever needed, and really set up a great technique that represents humanity's potential.


And of course, it can be brainstormed, changed, edited, whatever. it's flexible

jcogginsa wrote:Looks good, not entirely what i was expecting, but not bad.
Was it too hokey? My bad. :lol:
There are a couple cases of missing punctuation though
minor things like punctuation can be fixed in the final draft

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Post by jcogginsa » Sat Jan 30, 2016 12:40 am

FoolsGil wrote:
jcogginsa wrote: Never mind, I misread the Enlightenment thing. I thought it meant Roshi could defeat final form Freeza as soon as he achieved it. I realize that's wrong now.
I'm glad you reconsidered. We can hash out limitations or whatever, and really set up a great technique that represents humanity's potential.


jcogginsa wrote:Looks good, not entirely what i was expecting, but not bad.
Was it too hokey? My bad. :lol:
There are a couple cases of missing punctuation though
minor things like punctuation can be fixed in the final draft
Not hokey per say, I was just imagining them as a bit more mature than that. It's not bad, just not what I expected.

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Post by FoolsGil » Sat Jan 30, 2016 9:37 am

Will this be what timeline 10 events will be?

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Post by jcogginsa » Sat Jan 30, 2016 11:31 am

FoolsGil wrote:Will this be what timeline 10 events will be?

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Post by FoolsGil » Sat Jan 30, 2016 3:37 pm

jcogginsa wrote:

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Post by jcogginsa » Sat Jan 30, 2016 3:43 pm

FoolsGil wrote:
jcogginsa wrote:
I'm not to sure on that. There's a period of several years before Goku coming back would even be a possibility for her

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Post by FoolsGil » Sat Jan 30, 2016 3:47 pm

jcogginsa wrote: I'm not to sure on that. There's a period of several years before Goku coming back would even be a possibility for her

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