General Fan Fiction Thread

[TheUltimateNinja]

Getting pretty inspired to rewrite the recent Kuririn & Goku filler, it was so much wasted potential. I think I'll finish my Freeza fanfic tomorrow and get on it.

In less than 3 hours it will have been a day since you posted this.

Yeah, don't count on me finishing it today, didn't even get a word down

Ah, damn.

Anyway, since I really dislike Super's method of obtaining God ki (Stop your ki from leaking? Really?) I've thought of a new method. Basically the way I'd explain it is that as part of the Zenkai process, Saiyans draw in a bit of ki from their surroundings and their opponent. Thus, Whis teaches Vegeta how to use God ki by repeatedly bringing him to the brink of death which would result in Vegeta slowly absorbing minute amounts of God ki from the God ki rich environment and from Whis himself. At first it would fade away immediately, but eventually Vegeta would learn to retain and control it. Thoughts?

[Doctor.]

In less than 3 hours it will have been a day since you posted this.

Yeah, don't count on me finishing it today, didn't even get a word down

Ah, damn.

Anyway, since I really dislike Super's method of obtaining God ki (Stop your ki from leaking? Really?) I've thought of a new method. Basically the way I'd explain it is that as part of the Zenkai process, Saiyans draw in a bit of ki from their surroundings and their opponent. Thus, Whis teaches Vegeta how to use God ki by repeatedly bringing him to the brink of death which would result in Vegeta slowly absorbing minute amounts of God ki from the God ki rich environment and from Whis himself. At first it would fade away immediately, but eventually Vegeta would learn to retain and control it. Thoughts?

Reminds me a bit of Absalon's Gohan power-up. I wonder how effective that would be, though? God Ki is a huge boost and the environment doesn't give too much strength to the user. I guess it's not the Genki that gives the user strength, just the zenkai, and the Genki is a sort-of "enabler"?

[TheUltimateNinja]

Yeah, don't count on me finishing it today, didn't even get a word down

Ah, damn.

Anyway, since I really dislike Super's method of obtaining God ki (Stop your ki from leaking? Really?) I've thought of a new method. Basically the way I'd explain it is that as part of the Zenkai process, Saiyans draw in a bit of ki from their surroundings and their opponent. Thus, Whis teaches Vegeta how to use God ki by repeatedly bringing him to the brink of death which would result in Vegeta slowly absorbing minute amounts of God ki from the God ki rich environment and from Whis himself. At first it would fade away immediately, but eventually Vegeta would learn to retain and control it. Thoughts?

Reminds me a bit of Absalon's Gohan power-up. I wonder how effective that would be, though? God Ki is a huge boost and the environment doesn't give too much strength to the user. I guess it's not the Genki that gives the user strength, just the zenkai, and the Genki is a sort-of "enabler"?

The training would be done in Whis's staff, he'd create a dimension full of God ki so that's the only type of ki available for Vegeta to draw from.

[Doctor.]

Ah, damn.

Anyway, since I really dislike Super's method of obtaining God ki (Stop your ki from leaking? Really?) I've thought of a new method. Basically the way I'd explain it is that as part of the Zenkai process, Saiyans draw in a bit of ki from their surroundings and their opponent. Thus, Whis teaches Vegeta how to use God ki by repeatedly bringing him to the brink of death which would result in Vegeta slowly absorbing minute amounts of God ki from the God ki rich environment and from Whis himself. At first it would fade away immediately, but eventually Vegeta would learn to retain and control it. Thoughts?

Reminds me a bit of Absalon's Gohan power-up. I wonder how effective that would be, though? God Ki is a huge boost and the environment doesn't give too much strength to the user. I guess it's not the Genki that gives the user strength, just the zenkai, and the Genki is a sort-of "enabler"?

The training would be done in Whis's staff, he'd create a dimension full of God ki so that's the only type of ki available for Vegeta to draw from.

Seems fine, then.

[Scarz]

I decided to go back to brainstorming my story about the New Red Ribbon Army. This thread really inspired me!

I very roughly sketched my OCs just for the fun of it. I discussed they idea of the story on thread a while back. Anyway, here's how the characters coming out so far.

(But first a little info of the New RR Army before I get into character descriptions. They're failures. Almost Pilaf gang level of luck when fighting the heroes.)

Characters:

For a little guidance, here's a very rough sketch of the characters so far:
[spoiler][/spoiler]

Bell (Bell-48) - Saiyan/Human hybrid. The only Clone to live longer than a year. He's considered a failed experiment since his power doesn't exceed past Goku, Vegeta, or even Gohan. Bell has no transformations. He's blindly loyal and determined to please to make up for his short comings.

Cubeb - The head of the new RR science department. Despite working with RR, he's a capsule corp. fanboy and a big fan of Dr. Briefs. His experiments always falls short of expectations but he's the brightest scientist RR has at the moment.

Ms. Pepper (Commander Pepper) - The new leader of the RR Army. Cold and stoic. She's determined to take over the world, of course. She convinced recruits that saiyans and their half-breeds are dangerous through lies and propaganda. (Ironic since she's cloning them)

Chow - Pepper's body guard. Chow used to be a short and scrawny runt until he willingly volunteered to be one of RR (many) experiments. He's larger and stronger than Bell (but only by a bit). Unfortunately, Chow still has old dog habits that will resurface during battle.

Mince - Silent RR solider. What he lacks in strength, he makes up for in strong telepathic ability. One of RR first human experiments.

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It's fun brainstorming a story that centers around the villains! I still have a few more characters to tweak and draw.

I really want to expand the cast... I dunno? More silly characters? I want to make the story fun first and foremost despite it being centered around bad guys wanting to destroy the main heroes.

Also, about when the story takes place. I'm thinking between arcs during Super. I believe a couple of folks here suggested that. So maybe keep it really short stories where their plans always fails. Or maybe just make random shorts that doesn't really fall perfectly into any sort of continuity. It still takes place in the Super timeline but it doesn't follow all the rules to a tee. I'm still trying to come up with the idea of short stories, though. But I guess that will come later. What do you guys think?

[FoolsGil]

I decided to go back to brainstorming my story about the New Red Ribbon Army. This thread really inspired me!

I very roughly sketched my OCs just for the fun of it. I discussed they idea of the story on thread a while back. Anyway, here's how the characters coming out so far.

(But first a little info of the New RR Army before I get into character descriptions. They're failures. Almost Pilaf gang level of luck when fighting the heroes.)

Characters:

For a little guidance, here's a very rough sketch of the characters so far:
[spoiler][/spoiler]

Bell (Bell-48) - Saiyan/Human hybrid. The only Clone to live longer than a year. He's considered a failed experiment since his power doesn't exceed past Goku, Vegeta, or even Gohan. Bell has no transformations. He's blindly loyal and determined to please to make up for his short comings.

Cubeb - The head of the new RR science department. Despite working with RR, he's a capsule corp. fanboy and a big fan of Dr. Briefs. His experiments always falls short of expectations but he's the brightest scientist RR has at the moment.

Ms. Pepper (Commander Pepper) - The new leader of the RR Army. Cold and stoic. She's determined to take over the world, of course. She convinced recruits that saiyans and their half-breeds are dangerous through lies and propaganda. (Ironic since she's cloning them)

Chow - Pepper's body guard. Chow used to be a short and scrawny runt until he willingly volunteered to be one of RR (many) experiments. He's larger and stronger than Bell (but only by a bit). Unfortunately, Chow still has old dog habits that will resurface during battle.

Mince - Silent RR solider. What he lacks in strength, he makes up for in strong telepathic ability. One of RR first human experiments.

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It's fun brainstorming a story that centers around the villains! I still have a few more characters to tweak and draw.

I really want to expand the cast... I dunno? More silly characters? I want to make the story fun first and foremost despite it being centered around bad guys wanting to destroy the main heroes.

Also, about when the story takes place. I'm thinking between arcs during Super. I believe a couple of folks here suggested that. So maybe keep it really short stories where their plans always fails. Or maybe just make random shorts that doesn't really fall perfectly into any sort of continuity. It still takes place in the Super timeline but it doesn't follow all the rules to a tee. I'm still trying to come up with the idea of short stories, though. But I guess that will come later. What do you guys think?

Bell may not exceed the Saiyans, but if he can only match them in base, that's still really strong. Just a thought, if you move on towards a more serious plot later on, Send Bell after Krillin or Tenshinhan to capture them for experiments and brainwashing maybe?

When it comes to more characters, and make it more silly...what about an HR representative. Ms. Pepper hates her because since the RR is evil, they shouldn't care about how their people feel, but she remembers her predecessor was killed because employee conflict, so she keeps HR around. HR is also attracted to Bell, causing a sticky love triangle.

Next, two seriously incompetent soldiers. They are too low on the totem pole to talk to the Commander, but Bell and them are friends. Think Venture Bros. Henchmen 21 and 24

Lastly, a Satyr demon. He haunts Ms. Pepper due to a bet she lost. He's actually a Makaioshin on the level of Beers and would be willing to take care of Goku and Vegeta for Ms. Pepper, but under the condition that Ms. Pepper bears his children. Needless to say, that ain't gonna happen, so like TFS' Alucard from Hellsing Abridged, he pranks and harasses everyone. also leaves fur EVERYWHERE.

[Pickle_Jar]

I have to ask y'all is it alright to give your characters development. Like, just an example Goku becomes more serious and pragmatic?

....Who told you there's anything wrong with development?

Well I just assumed that it was wrong to shake up the main characters personality's, shake things up a bit, give them some quirks. That sort of thing

It's doable if you're consistent and do research if the change is due to something like a mental illness or disability. One way to accurately write a disability is talk to actually disabled people. Read their blogs or watch their Youtube vlogs. You'll learn a lot more than a medical book will teach you. Medical books can give you the "whats" of a disability, but disabled people can give you the insider "hows" of their disability. The same principle applies to mental illnesses, too.

Long-winded mention of a fanfic I'm working on under the spoiler.

[spoiler]Case in point: I'm currently working on a Mirai timeline AU where Vegeta survived the fight with the Androids, but they severed his spinal cord. There weren't any Senzu beans available at the time, and by the time there were more it was too late to help him. So, Vegeta's a T10 paraplegic who can very well kick your ass from a wheelchair thank-you-very-much. Bulma had to build him a Saiyajin-proof chair because regular ones tended to blow up or get squished in the gravity room OR the wheels broke because he's too damn strong for his own good. Vegeta can hit 50mph on a single wheel push if he's got a straightaway. His chair can withstand the gravity room, being crashed into and survive a direct ki blast. He could tow your car with his chair, though he'd probably give you the finger and keep on wheelin'. His fighting style doesn't change much. He can power up/fight from his chair and has no problem taking it into the sky. Hell, in the sky you wouldn't know anything was different until you saw him not using his legs at all.

BUT at the same time, the violence of his injury left Vegeta with PTSD. The way he gets hurt is fast and brutal...it's all the trauma he took during the beating from Freeza smashed into the span of a few seconds.

Vegeta's mental illness is technically complex PTSD because it causes reactions related to traumas all throughout his life and the Androids is the one that made him snap. His trauma from the Androids is the most prominent because it's recent. And it's not pretty when Vegeta gets triggered. He's hypervigilant, has panic attacks, has flashbacks, he dissociates, he loses blocks of time and his PTSD-rages are terrifying. He has an episode that leaves him boo-hoo sobbing in Bulma's arms because he recognizes how much being mentally ill has messed up his life.

Bulma plays an important part in the story, too. She practically nags Vegeta out of his coma and refused to let him give up. She advocated for him when the doctor in charge suggested pulling life support because he mistakenly based Vegeta's survival chances on human standards. She made sure nurses treated Vegeta respectfully, and fired the ones who didn't. She built Vegeta several different wheelchairs until she got one that worked absolutely perfectly for his needs. She is his shoulder to cry on, she keeps her cool when he's having a freak-out moment and she call out his asshattery when he's being a dickhead.

Bulma shows her strength by keeping her head together until nobody's looking-- and that's when she cries, screams or throws things. She is 100% a caregiver in this story and she is hell-bent on building the Time Machine because she wants to see the Androids dead as much as Vegeta does.

Trunks is dealing with puberty and frustrated that his power is on a plateau. It has to hit a growth spurt just like his body does, but there's no telling when it will happen. He's kind of a brat, but he's very attached to Vegeta. He's the one prone to getting scared if he sees Vegeta pass out from low blood pressure in the gravity room or go into a seizure due to autonomic dysreflexia. AD is something people with SCI's get if there's pain below their lesion. They may not feel the pain, but their body knows it's hurt and goes totally bonkers because it can't turn off the reaction. The high blood pressure can cause heart attacks or hemorrhagic strokes. Vegeta has violent seizures if his blood pressure shoots up, and he can survive blood pressures that kill humans.

One thing I did different than the History of Trunks is Vegeta hasn't gone SSJ yet. (That will happen later, not spoiling how!) Other than that, it's more or less the same story. Gohan loses his arm and gets killed. Trunks will go back in time like in HoT movie, and when he comes back he and Vegeta will go after the Androids together.

I can say for sure that I'm not going to have Vegeta get healed and walk again. He's going to realize he's not a broken man and comes to see his chair as a source of pride. It says "I survived something that killed everyone else" and wishing it gone would be a cop-out. Plus, it'll alienate disabled readers. I'm disabled (autistic) and I HATE stories where disability as seen as the most horrible outcome ever. Vegeta starts out his injury as a quad on a vent and regains his upper body and breathing as damage caused by the surgery on his spine heals. He overcomes a lot of internalized notions about disability and discovers how strong he really is via the sheer act of surviving something impossible.

The fic is ultimately a love story, because Vegeta has to struggle with the sexual effects of his disability too. He can't "get it up" anymore. He is head over heels for Bulma (she is for him, too), but ashamed that he can't "perform" until she helps him realize that she doesn't care about that. She wants the intimacy of being close to him and will take whatever he can offer. They end up redefining sex in their own way, and it's the moment where he's finally able to really open up for her. (His first time with her was a drunk one night stand, Trunks was an oops baby). Vegeta's first time with Bulma was emotionless sex. Their second time so many years later is where Vegeta learns the difference between fucking and making love. It's an important moment as it helps Vegeta realize he's not broken after all.

He'll get his mojo back. And when his mojo comes back, WATCH OUT, WORLD!

Disabled readers are my target audience, though anyone can enjoy the story for what it is. The story is meant to break some disability/mental illness stereotypes, call out ableism and show that disabled peoples' lives are valuable. Disabled lives having value is something Vegeta has to struggle with, too, because Saiyajins used to kill anyone too disabled to fight. (Proven canonically when Vegeta killed Nappa...the irony is 'Geets now has a similar injury!)


The story reveals that Raditz and Nappa had invisible disabilities of their own.

Nappa had chronic back pain (spinal osteoarthritis) that had him popping pills like candy and it's the reason Goku broke his back. The pills caused his hair to fall out and were slowly eating away his strength. Yet Nappa kept a stiff upper lip and only Vegeta could tell when his pain was really bad. Channeling his pain into anger kept him going a lot longer than most people with a back as bad as his. He knew any fight could be his last because nobody would come to help him if he got seriously injured due to his crappy spine. Buuut he never anticipated that moment coming on Earth the way it did.

Raditz had severe epilepsy that never responded to medication. There was a tiny spot in his brain that constantly zapped with seizure activity and actual seizures happened when the activity in those cells spread out. Think of it as somebody striking a match over and over until you get a flame, and the flame is a seizure. Most Saiyajins with epilepsy like Raditz never lived past their second birthday, and those who did were developmentally disabled by seizure related brain damage. Raditz lucked out.

He had hundreds of simple partial seizures a day. That's several seizures per hour, each lasting anywhere from fifteen to twenty seconds. You could be talking to him while he was having one and not know it was happening unless he told you. They caused vertigo and a tingling in his left thumb; he'd say it felt like the floor getting yanked sideways. He learned to compensate and fight through the vertigo since it always "flipped" the same way every time, so he was able to fight just fine during an SP.

Drop seizures (randomly falling over) were another seizure he had, though not as often. He was more prone to them if his seizure threshold was low, such as a lack of sleep or being sick.

He had tonic-clonic (grand mal) seizures, too, and they were also more prone to happen if his threshold was lowered. Some of his TC's generalized out of his simple partials. SP's became a TC aura if the tingle went up his arm instead of staying in his thumb. Most of his TC's happened in his sleep. Flickering light could set them off too. His scouter had polarized glass that counter-flickered so a strobe light would look steady and it mitigated 99% of his photosensitivity seizures. Sometimes Freeza punished Raditz by having him remove his scouter and flickering his ki. Yeah, a real dick move.

His post-ictal phase was complete paralysis for a brief time. He would lay there doing the slurp-gurgle breathing, yet be totally aware of his surroundings. Unlike humans, I have it that Saiyajins don't lose consciousness during a TC unless they get knocked out by something else. Raditz would've said TC's hurt like a bitch. He'll also pee and poop himself during them. Vegeta and Nappa would take bets on whether he would pee, poop, do both or stay clean if he had a TC in their presence. And yes, they placed their bets in Raditz's earshot while he was on the ground mid-seizure. What can I say? Saiyajins are dicks!

Raditz's TC's had one perk-- his ki went into convulsions with his body. So if he went into a TC while powered up to max, he released deadly shockwaves far stronger than anything he could shoot normally. The downsides were the shockwaves being uncontrollable and the brutal exhaustion of expelling tons of energy in one go. And God have mercy on anyone if he had seizures as an Oozaru...hoooly shit, it looked like a Godzilla movie!

Finally, I write that Vegeta was already chronically ill before his SCI. I won't detail it much other than to say an illness in his teens caused him to lose half his small intestine. Removing it to save his life stunted his growth and messed up his heart and kidneys. A human in Vegeta's condition wouldn't live a week, but Saiyajin bodies go to ridiculous lengths to compensate for organ damage. They'll compensate and compensate until an organ fails. Vegeta's SCI exacerbates his chronic illness issues, so he deals with THAT on top of everything else. Vegeta had his medical rap sheet sealed away by paying doctors exorbitant fees, so his list of health issues won't show up on a casual scan through.

The reason Vegeta, Raditz and Nappa kept their issues under wraps was they figured they could still fight, and they all understood nobody would save them if their health problems downed them in battle. Freeza was also prone to going through medical records and pruning soldiers with health issues that were getting worse with time. Nappa would've been one of them if he survived Earth.[/spoiler]

[ShadowBardock89]

My fanfic, though based on DBZA, has Nappa becoming a successful media mogul and builds connections (ex. "I know a guy...," which could be a running gag).
He is married to Colonel Violet (who latched on to Nappa because he was a rising powerhouse in the entertainment industry), the director and the assistant that look like Commander Red and Staff Officer Black ARE them that has been brought to life through a deal brokered through Raditz (who has become the royal consort to Princess Snake much like in Harukanaru Densetsu and they are a power couple) and used political and economic leverage over King Yemma to get it done. Nappa is responsible for the Cell Game Reenactment, The Great Saiyaman Movie, and much later Great Saiyaman vs. Mr. Satan. The scene where Rock is robbing the bank and Videl stopping him is actually Nappa filming a scene for his next project. Nappa is also the one, again through Raditz and Princess Snake, brings the Afterlife Tournament to the masses. The tournament in DBZ movie 9 with X.S. Cash is the result of a partnership with Nappa. I also have Raditz being a Vince McMahon/Triple H/Dana White figure in which he builds a promotion filled with past villains, like the Ginyu Force who become the Bullet Club of the promotion, that are recruited after they die (like Bojack). Ginyu Force merchandise helps build the brand (the motto is "Even Hell Runs On Money!") and videos uploaded to GodTube help spread it across the multiverse. The Vinnie (you know, from Legacy of Goku 2) becomes Nappa's spokesman and PR guy. Eventually, Nappa becomes a cultural icon through his business relationship with Mr. Satan, the success with his films, and the success of Raditz's MMA promotion that transcends the realms of the living and the dead. At this point Nappa decides political office is in his future and the leader of the world is in his sights.
Nappa is king, Violet is his queen, Commander Red becomes Minister of Defense, Staff Officer Black becomes Deputy Minister of Defense, The Vinnie becomes Press Secretary, Raditz becomes Ambassador to the Afterlife (actually is wished back to life to serve the term), and other positions are filled (do not have the time or patience to think on this). However, all of Nappa's wish-making is in fact how the Shadow Dragons are born from overusage of the Dragon Balls.
I'm adding in that the Dragon Ball movies (especially Path to Power) are retellings told by Nappa's production company.

[RisanF]

I have to ask y'all is it alright to give your characters development. Like, just an example Goku becomes more serious and pragmatic?

....Who told you there's anything wrong with development?

Well I just assumed that it was wrong to shake up the main characters personality's, shake things up a bit, give them some quirks. That sort of thing

Generally, you'll want to be at least in the same ballpark with your characterization, but you're allowed a little leeway in the name of creative license. If you're planning a major shake up with a character, be sure to write a plot that shows how they got from Point A to Point B. However, keep in mind that the characters' existing traits can be used to your advantage. Once you understand a character's appeal, they'll essentially start writing themselves, and you'll be able to get them to do what you want to do much easier.

Alright, here's a story I'm trying to get readership for:

Title: From Penguin Village with Love (2016 Version)
Summary: After missing an appointment with Chi-Chi, Kid Goku takes a wrong turn and drops in on Arale again...literally! The two soon resume their blossoming friendship, but what happens when all parties are made aware of this? Goku/Arale

Notes: Just like it says on the tin, this is a straight-up Goku/Arale pairing fic, and features a lot of content from Dr, Slump. The story takes place during Goku's three-year-trip around the world, and then heads off into its own continuity. Most of the action takes place in Penguin Village, with key characters including Senbei, Midori, Obotchaman, and others. Chi-Chi also shows up to challenge Arale for Goku, culminating in a showdown in Chapter 4.

This is my attempt to write a romance with the two most difficult characters to write romantically. Come take a look and see how I did!

(available here or at FF.Net)
viewtopic.php?f=6&t=35971
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12218635/1 ... 16-Version

Here's a brief excerpt from Chapter 2:

[spoiler]Atop the seaside birch tree, in the rising sun, a small swine was self-levitating to its highest branch. Mr. Pig was preparing for his daily rite, clearing out the frog in his throat. Reaching over to a standing mike, he dusted off the head and crowed his traditional announcement: "It's morning in Penguin Village!" It filled the entire island like a plague; yet, nothing was as comforting as this warbling squawk.

Truly, it was a fine day in this tropical paradise, sparkling and sweet. The palm trees were covered in soft dewdrops, and autumn berry bushes perked up throughout the gently rolling hills. At the Norimaki residence, butterflies danced among the tall grass and flirted carelessly with their life mates. And the smell of burbling batter was wafting from the open window, mixing in with the organic fragrances of all the other things in this paragraph.

The beautiful young woman smiled sweetly. "Done!" Licking her dainty hands free from the pancake batter, Midori regarded her confection with the satisfaction of a master artist. She took the pan to the kitchen table, where her husband was waiting anxiously. Then, with a smile, she carefully placed a healthy portion onto his plate, happy with her domestic duties.

"Honey, have you heard the news?" the woman asked conversationally, adding another pancake to his helping.

"Hrrrmm...?" the man pondered somewhat absently, poking at his breakfast with a fork.

"Arale brought home a visitor yesterday," Midori continued, moving back over to the stove. "That nice boy with the tail's come back!"

"Say WHAT?!" he burst out in surprise, nearly causing his wife lose her grip on the saucepan. "The same kid that came with that Red Ribbon Army?!"

"Well, he doesn't seem to have those men following him now," she said nonchalantly, putting down pancakes on the bar. "I'm sure it'll be alright!"

Norimaki Senbei (or Dr. Slump, as the man was derogatory dubbed), sighed exasperatedly, laying his flabby arms in front of his plate. He had spent all yesterday working in his laboratory, so the night's events had blown over his head. He should've known he couldn't trust his android daughter not to bring in every weirdo that fell from the sky. Now there was a guest, and a rather odd one at that.

"I just hope he doesn't break anything," he murmured, feeling doubtful already at this situation."

"Well surely you don't think that 'he' will cause any trouble," Midori smiled sunnily, bringing some bacon to the table.

"Anyone Arale gravitates to IS trouble," Senbei grumbled, putting his hand to his cheek. His eyes fired up with fear. "Where is she, anyway? At this time, she should already be on her way to..."

"N'CHA, HAKASE!" and the doctor's face was flattened into his pancakes, courtesy of the cheerful robot that he invented.

Senbei groaned into the mush, feeling utterly helpless. Then, he swung to Arale with a scenery-chewing scowl on his face. "Dammit, how many times have I told you not to sneak up on me like that?!" he hollered, spit fleckles impacting on the girl's face.

"Hoyo?" Senbei's "daughter" was oblivious to his frustration, not sure why he was so upset. Then, she eyed his face curiously. "Hey, why d'ya have glop all over your face?" she asked, blinking sporadically.

The doctor lurched closer to Arale, somehow managing to stretch his facial features even more than they already were. Then, he clawed at his head vehemently, making horrid growling noises like a prisoner in total agony.

As Senbei continued his tantrum, Midori turned to the girl with a grin. "By the way, Arale-chan, have you put little Goku's ninja outfit on the cushion," she asked.

"Sure," Arale responded simply, a question still on her face. "But what do you need his clothes for?"

"Oh, I just wanted to do some sewing while Turbo's asleep," the woman shrugged her shoulders cheerily. "After his fall, it will certainly need a little patchwork."

Suddenly, a klatter from upstairs attracted Midori's attention, and she turned and beamed. "That must be him now!"

Arale grinned, and jumped off of her perch on Senbei. Running around the kitchen's edge, she made her way to the bottom of the stairs. The little android looked up the ascending steps, perking her ears at strange noises just beyond her sight. Then, her smile widened, and her eyes went loopy and happy. "Go-kun!"

Atop the staircase, with a fanfare of "Peep peep!"ing, was Goku, as well as two other creatures. To either side of him were cupid-like creatures, whom we'll call Ga-chans 1 and 2. "Peep peep!" They were identical to each other, bearing curly, green hair and little nodes coming from their skulls. Both of them were cheerfully leading their ward down, yanking at his clothes and continuing to cry their little calls: "Peep peep!"

The real sight here, though, was the boy himself. Goku was dressed in the exact same outfit that Arale typically wore. Grey overalls, red golf shirt, it was all there, right down to the wing cap on his head. Funny thing was, instead of reading "ARALE," the logo on front now spelled "GOKUH." But even with this misconception, you had to admit: it completed the ensemble quite nicely.

With a small giggle Goku hopped down the last three steps, prompting the Ga-chans to hover back to their mistress. "Heh heh!" he chuckled, fingering the bill of his hat. "Weird outfit!"

Arale nodded, watching her little friends come to her side. "Ain't it cool?!" she cooed, glancing to each cherub with a smile.

"Oh, Goku-kun!" Midori hustled over to the boy, who looked up with a wide-eyed expression on his face. "I got your diagram for the new uniform you wanted. You're...not a great artist, but I can make do!"

"Didja see the 'kame' sign on it?" Goku asked her. "The turtle guy's my master, y'know."

"Oh yes!" the woman answered. "Pretty strange symbolism for a dogi, though."

Goku grinned cheekily.

"Hoyo?" Arale's mouth made an "o" shape as if she was sucking through a straw. "Who's Dogi?"

"That's my martial arts uniform." Goku turned to his friend and offered her the same smile. "Midori-san said she'd make a new one for me! Now I don't have to wear that dog guy's stuff."

"But why doncha want to be a ninja?" she asked. "Ninjas are strong, right?"

"Not really," Goku said. "I beat five of them, and they weren't very strong. You can have the ninja stuff if you want."

"Yay!" Arale hopped up and down like a high-school cheerleader as Goku watched with a smile. "Ninja ninja! Ninjas are totally sweet, and flip out and kill people!"

"Now remember, Goku," Midori interjected, putting her hands on her hips. "Be sure to take it easy while you're out. Your head still has a nasty bruise!"

"Huh?" The boy blinked and tilted his head. "While I'm out?"

She was unshaken by this question. "Arale has offered to give you a tour of Penguin Village!" Midori explained, nodding her head. "You must've been half asleep when we told you."

"And it's not 'huh,'" Arale corrected, a Ga-chan clinging to her head. "It's 'hoyo.'"

Goku blinked again, staring blankly at the girl. "Hoyo?"

Arale smiled. "That's it!" Ignoring the martial artist's still-confused expression, she took hold of his arm. "C'mon, Go-kun, we gotta go!"

Breaking into a run, she dragged Goku towards the door, which was thankfully already opened for them. "Bye-cha, Sensei Midori!" she called out, taking off to the hills.

"Hoyo!" Goku called out, as he was helplessly wrangled on Arale's grand tour.[/spoiler]

[ekrolo2]

I've nearly finished fine tuning Vicious Gods Wrath but I've hit bit of a snag: should I put Super Saiyan Blue in it? In the original, I ignored it and simply kept regular Super Saiyan around but now I'm not so sure if I want to go in that direction.

[Doctor.]

I've nearly finished fine tuning Vicious Gods Wrath but I've hit bit of a snag: should I put Super Saiyan Blue in it? In the original, I ignored it and simply kept regular Super Saiyan around but now I'm not so sure if I want to go in that direction.

Depends, has regular Super Saiyan already appeared? If so, then no. If not, then you if you really want to have it in, you can say that Blue is an improved SSJ and Goku can no longer go SSJ.

[ekrolo2]

I've nearly finished fine tuning Vicious Gods Wrath but I've hit bit of a snag: should I put Super Saiyan Blue in it? In the original, I ignored it and simply kept regular Super Saiyan around but now I'm not so sure if I want to go in that direction.

Depends, has regular Super Saiyan already appeared? If so, then no. If not, then you if you really want to have it in, you can say that Blue is an improved SSJ and Goku can no longer go SSJ.

It did show up during last chunk of Goku vs Beerus' movie fight but after that no.

[Doctor.]

I've nearly finished fine tuning Vicious Gods Wrath but I've hit bit of a snag: should I put Super Saiyan Blue in it? In the original, I ignored it and simply kept regular Super Saiyan around but now I'm not so sure if I want to go in that direction.

Depends, has regular Super Saiyan already appeared? If so, then no. If not, then you if you really want to have it in, you can say that Blue is an improved SSJ and Goku can no longer go SSJ.

It did show up during last chunk of Goku vs Beerus' movie fight but after that no.

No, I mean if it showed up prior in the fanfic.

[ekrolo2]

No, I mean if it showed up prior in the fanfic.

Just the chunk that retells the BoG movie, in the original version of VGW, it's what Goku & Vegeta used to fight Golden Freeza but I'm not sure if I want to keep it that way or have Blue as their default form now.

[Doctor.]

No, I mean if it showed up prior in the fanfic.

Just the chunk that retells the BoG movie, in the original version of VGW, it's what Goku & Vegeta used to fight Golden Freeza but I'm not sure if I want to keep it that way or have Blue as their default form now.

Isn't this like the third time you're revising it?

[ekrolo2]

Isn't this like the third time you're revising it?

Second and last before I start on the sequel

[Gog]

I've nearly finished fine tuning Vicious Gods Wrath but I've hit bit of a snag: should I put Super Saiyan Blue in it? In the original, I ignored it and simply kept regular Super Saiyan around but now I'm not so sure if I want to go in that direction.

Keep SSB, if you keep regular SSJ then why wouldn't Goku and Vegeta be able to go SSJ3 against Freeza. I didn't even realize you kept SSJ in the vicious god's wrath.

[ekrolo2]

Keep SSB, if you keep regular SSJ then why wouldn't Goku and Vegeta be able to go SSJ3 against Freeza. I didn't even realize you kept SSJ in the vicious god's wrath.

Really? I don't know how you missed it what with the golden fire description and all

I know Blue works symbolically better as blue fire being hotter than red or yellow but I just don't see why Super Saiyan can't stick around and get amped by training gains.

[Gog]

Keep SSB, if you keep regular SSJ then why wouldn't Goku and Vegeta be able to go SSJ3 against Freeza. I didn't even realize you kept SSJ in the vicious god's wrath.

Really? I don't know how you missed it what with the golden fire description and all

I know Blue works symbolically better as blue fire being hotter than red or yellow but I just don't see why Super Saiyan can't stick around and get amped by training gains.

I know, but if they have Super Saiyan, why not 2, or 3. Unless I'm missing something here of course

[ekrolo2]

I know, but if they have Super Saiyan, why not 2, or 3. Unless I'm missing something here of course

Well the intent is that Super Saiyan makes 2 and 3 pointless by getting its multiplier boosted, that is what the original rules were going to be until Blue and Super changed everything.