Trouser wrote: Mon Sep 27, 2021 6:12 am
The manga version is great. Only thing I'd fix is the ending: Trunks stays so he can find a way to revive his timeline (I'd get rid ot that stupid "two Trunks and two Mai's" thing). This and later he can fight in Tournament of Power to repay everyone for help in fighting Goku Black.
^^This is a priority.
After fixing that, I'd center the story around Trunks, giving him more focus. For that, I'd mix manga and anime events. Trunks is built up like a hero, like Gohan was in the Buu arc, but in the end, Trunks would get the payoff. I'd also have him train with North Kai which gives him access to the spirit bomb sword we see in the anime, but also adds another layer of connection to him and Zamasu since Zamasu was the North Kai of Universe 10.
SSJRage looks the same but would be called Super Saiyan Demi-God and would be a form exclusive to those who've awakened to god ki but aren't properly trained in its use. Trunks would gain access to this after training with Vegeta and feeling the full power of a god's blows (opens the door for Cabba later during the TOP). He and Vegeta would train for a slightly longer period than the anime.
Less time hopping, as someone above said. And there is no reason that they should have both left Trunks all alone to fight both Black and Zamasu, that may actually be the dumbest thing in the arc and kind of OOC for Goku and Vegeta. I feel they'd have to be unconscious or dragged back kicking and screaming. What would work better is if Roshi had survived in the future (is he dead?) and Goku went to retrain with him there and if Kami's lookout was still around, prompting Vegeta and Trunks to flee there to train like in the past.
Vegeta would help Trunks master his demi-god state and after a knockdown drag-out fight between Vegetto and Merged Zamasu, we get the Trunks Spirit Bomb sword scene, only there's more than just the 10 humans. We get hopeful glimpses of other humans that are in hiding around the world and Kaioshin and Trunks asks them to lend their energy and hopes to the future.
I'd get rid of the time ring nonsense and just chalk it up to a forbidden power that Zamasu studied to enact his zero-mortals plan. I'd have Zamasu disdain the gods too, for being inept and allowing the mortals to be raised so high. So basically he'd look down on anyone that isn't himself. This trait is sort of there already, but I'd emphasize it more.
I'd either take out the god-killing bullet or flesh out that concept, it's creation and those scenes with Mai way more. Since it's Dragon Ball, seems more fitting to drop it entirely.
I'd play up the role of the survivors much more, with many old faces still around to help out. Lots of folks from Dragon Ball, particularly Eighter who can't be sensed and maybe a future version of #16. And lots of those martial artists who remember what it was like being hunted down by Piccolo and his brood. They'd all contribute to the Spirit Bomb Sword.
If Zeno has to wipe out Trunks' world, I'd prefer the threat that anime Zamasu presented. Again, Zamasu is using forbidden powers to manipulate time, but who's to say it stops there. All that weird shit Goku Black was doing with space-time, also a part of Zamasu's taboo abilities, along with his expansion into the universe, a warped version of the Kaioshin's creation magic. As Zamasu infects the universe, twisting all into his image, that's when Zeno shows up to put the hurtin' on the future. Afterwards, I wouldn't have Goku time travel into a white void. Beforehand, I'd have him have an actual conversation with Zeno, explain things and promise to find a friend for him once he fixes the future. After Zeno destroys the future, he finds Goku and thus we get our two Zenos (since I can't change that).
As Trouser said, I'd have Trunks ACTIVELY attempting to bring back his universe. I'd do that for a fews arcs until finally paying it off with either Trunks realizing that he should let the dead rest or him successfully wishing his world back (probably option 2). He should have Tien's spot in the tournament of power, as much as it pains me to say that. Seeing him freakout at how cavalier his allies are treated universal erasure would be entertaining to say the least.
Those are the main things I can think of at the moment. Yeah, and future Launch should be a thing. She should be in Future Mai's resistance.
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