Fan Manga

Post by **SaiyaJedi** » Sun Aug 07, 2005 5:52 pm

Holken wrote:
Gamingdevil wrote:Ok I altered that, what about page 11? What's up with that? I thought "rater" was "to miss" as in "I missed my train"
"rater" it is the opposite to succeed. ="I have missed my drawing" for example.
It is "They didn't miss them the cousins" I think.

"Rater" is "to fail." I'd have to look at the other thing to see what it is, and I don't feel like doing that right now, so...

Holken · Post by **Holken** » Sun Aug 07, 2005 6:43 pm

LaRésistance wrote:How can I help, what's the problem?

It is for the page 11, the sentence of Végéta, please.

LaRésistance · Post by **LaRésistance** » Sun Aug 07, 2005 7:00 pm

Here is what I came up with for the translation:

Wow! They sure didn't do a slapdash job on the cousins!

I had to change the meaning a little bit because a translation of the French quote would have made little sense in English.

Metrite · Post by **Metrite** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 2:46 am

Now Holken can have translations for page 10, page 11, and page 12.

Now the next race for the next few pages.

Gamingdevil · Post by **Gamingdevil** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 4:32 am

If you'd rather do it yourself Holken, this is the final form:

p9

Narator: Chapter 2: The Trials
Narator: Goku and Vegeta are heading towards the planet of the Protoss.
Narator: Protossia
Alien 1: Bring them to the Hall of Trials!
Alien 2: Ok!
Alien: Go stand over there!
Goku: In this thing?
Goku: Wow, it's like Instantaneous Movement!
Alien: Follow me!
Goku: We're coming!!

p10

Vegeta: Come on! Pass on to the action!
Alien: First of all we will test you, after that, if you succeed, we will start cloning you on large scale so that we can have an army worthy of that name.
Vegeta: They don't know that I am an army all by myself!
Alien: The robots should be useless against you. Well then...
Goku: Look out! I sense large powers!
Goku: Unbelievable!!
Alien: We have recreated the Saiyans, but we need pure genes to have thousands of them.
Vegeta: He takes us for products useful only for battle! He will pay for that! Let's get them Kakarot!
Vegeta: Bring it on!

p 11

Goku: Woah! Wow! They sure didn't do a slapdash job on the cousins!
Goku: Anyway...!
Goku: It has begun!!

p 12

Goku: I see...! You are very tough.

Also, why is your text in purple Metrite?

Holken · Post by **Holken** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 7:22 am

Thank!

http://dbzwarrior.supafan.net/BD/3/Page15849b%5f/1

Gamingdevil · Post by **Gamingdevil** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 1:13 pm

You're welcom

, by the way it still says there we only translated the first 2 pages

Metrite · Post by **Metrite** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 2:12 pm

Gamingdevil wrote:If you'd rather do it yourself Holken, this is the final form:

p9
Narator: Chapter 2: The Trials
Narator: Goku and Vegeta are heading towards the planet of the Protoss.
Narator: Protossia
Alien 1: Bring them to the Hall of Trials!
Alien 2: Ok!
Alien: Go stand over there!
Goku: In this thing?
Goku: Wow, it's like Instantaneous Movement!
Alien: Follow me!
Goku: We're coming!!
p10
Vegeta: Come on! Pass on to the action!
Alien: First of all we will test you, after that, if you succeed, we will start cloning you on large scale so that we can have an army worthy of that name.
Vegeta: They don't know that I am an army all by myself!
Alien: The robots should be useless against you. Well then...
Goku: Look out! I sense large powers!
Goku: Unbelievable!!
Alien: We have recreated the Saiyans, but we need pure genes to have thousands of them.
Vegeta: He takes us for products useful only for battle! He will pay for that! Let's get them Kakarot!
Vegeta: Bring it on!
p 11
Goku: Woah! Wow! They sure didn't do a slapdash job on the cousins!
Goku: Anyway...!
Goku: It has begun!!
p 12
Goku: I see...! You are very tough.

Also, why is your text in purple Metrite?

He already had page nine up at the time.

The text was purple because the program I used that time(It was readable, though. And I just wanted him to see what the lines on the next pages were so far).

Gamingdevil wrote:by the way it still says there we only translated the first 2 pages

Are you talking about the part of his art page next to the translated "Attack of the clone"? If so, it says how you guys did the translations(The only thing it's saying about the first two pages is how I did the text for those ones).

Now to see who has the courage to accept the challenge of translating the still-have-only-a-few-lines pages 13 and 14.

Bejiita · Post by **Bejiita** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 5:38 pm

Son Goku wrote:Will Future Trunks talk to the Trunks of the regular timeline?

It's likely, I don't know though, he probably will.

Son Goku · Post by **Son Goku** » Mon Aug 08, 2005 6:30 pm

Holken wrote:Thank!

http://dbzwarrior.supafan.net/BD/3/Page15849b%5f/1

A question about the continuity: If Gohan and Future Trunks gather the Dragonballs, how can they wish everyone back two days later?

Gamingdevil · Post by **Gamingdevil** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 5:48 am

Son Goku wrote:
Holken wrote:Thank!

http://dbzwarrior.supafan.net/BD/3/Page15849b%5f/1
A question about the continuity: If Gohan and Future Trunks gather the Dragonballs, how can they wish everyone back two days later?

I've asked myself that too, but it really doesn't matter as it's an alternate universe anyway.

Gamingdevil · Post by **Gamingdevil** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 6:58 am

Sorry for the double post, but it's already a couple of hours later so...

p 13

Goku: What the...?!
Vegeta: How rude*! How dare you fight me, I am your prince! Get lost if you want to stay alive!
Alien: It's useless, you're only wasting your breath, they don't understand a word of what you're saying.
Vegeta: In that case, too bad for them.

*Does anyone have something better for this? It's correct, but it just sounds weird to me

p 14

Vegeta: You won't help him...? I understand...!
Vegeta: Here! Have fun with this!

p 15

Vegeta: Damn it!
Goku: I won't be able to handle another attack! But I have no way of dodging...except...of course, the Shunkanido*!
Goku: Now!
*Instantaneous Movement

p 16 doesn't need translation

p 17

Alien: Those warriors are perfect!
Goku: Come on! Let's go Vegeta!
Alien: What are they doing?
Alien: Huh...they're increasing their power!
Alien: Ah! Those idiots*! Quick, Saiyan alert!
Alien: Come on! Neutralise them!
Vegeta: You think you can stop us with that?

*Sounds a bit weird as well

There you go, that's almost another chapter

Holken · Post by **Holken** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 7:20 am

Son Goku wrote:
Holken wrote:Thank!

http://dbzwarrior.supafan.net/BD/3/Page15849b%5f/1
A question about the continuity: If Gohan and Future Trunks gather the Dragonballs, how can they wish everyone back two days later?

Yes, it is an error, sorry

It was in the fan-fiction.

Gamingdevil wrote:I've asked myself that too, but it really doesn't matter as it's an alternate universe anyway.

perhaps, undoubtedly.
I will ask the author of the fan-fiction.

Rocketman · Post by **Rocketman** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 1:39 pm

For that matter, why are they gathering the DBs to wish back a mountain?

Son Goku · Post by **Son Goku** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 3:12 pm

Rocketman wrote:For that matter, why are they gathering the DBs to wish back a mountain?

Why did they get the dragonballs to wish back just one forest? Because noone wants to piss of the God of Love! Oh yea, and some "Save the Animals" crap

Bejiita · Post by **Bejiita** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 5:01 pm

I like the way you do fights Holken, you draw the basic attacks well and it's easy to tell what is happening.

And also, I'm doing chapter 2(and so on) in the traditional right to left way, at least then I can call it manga. You can say what you think, if it's a good idea or not.

Consider the chapter one style a getting used to style from my point of view, and as much as the style of my art mimics Toriyama's(well, some pictures do) I figured the left to right western style takes the authenticity away. Even though it's a Fan Manga...

Rocketman · Post by **Rocketman** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 6:06 pm

I think Goku should go ask Cell for help. >.>

And hopefully, Future Trunks isn't trying to pick a fight in Bejiita's comic, because it won't go well for him.

Bejiita · Post by **Bejiita** » Tue Aug 09, 2005 6:30 pm

Don't worry, he's not an enemy, like I said, I'm not really going to go for a good guy turning evil like Majin Vegeta or the Bebi saga. I'm trying to keep it like DBZ should be.

Gamingdevil · Post by **Gamingdevil** » Thu Aug 11, 2005 1:59 pm

Say LaRésistance if you're ever on again, would you mind checking out those asterixes of me? Then Holken can update his manga again

Dayspring · Post by **Dayspring** » Thu Aug 11, 2005 10:55 pm

p 18.
Goku: I... I'm losing my strength!
Alien: Ouf! Luckily for us we installed a weakpoint inside them...
Alien: ... Even if they don't have their tails anymore, the gene which renders them incapacitated is still ative!
Narrator: 4 hours pass...
Title: Chapter 3 - To The Rescue!!!
Narrator: On Earth
Krillin: I got it!
Bulma: Super!! That's the seventh one! We can summon Shenron!
Krillin: Dragon! Appear and grant our wish!

p 19.
Shenron: I am Shenron, the sacred dragon... I can grant two wishes so chose carefully.
Krillin: We wish for you to repair all the damage done this morning to the south!
Shenron: That's very easy!! There, it's done!!
Bulma: All right! Thanks!
Shenron: And, what else do you desire?
Krillin: Uh well...
Krillin: What do we ask for?
Gohan: I wish to be taken to my dad!
Piccolo: That's a good idea. We'll all go!
Bulma+Oolong: Good luck!
Oolong: W...we'll stay here!
Piccolo: Dragon!
Shenron: Got it! I will teleport you next to Goku!

p 20:
Bulma: Be careful...
Narrator: On Protossia
Alien: H...How did they get here?! Guards! GUARDS!
Piccolo: Gohan! Your father and Vegeta are just on the level above us! Go on ahead, we'll take care of them!
Gohan: OK!
Trunks: Did you see? They're super saiyans!
Tenshinhan: Krillin and I will take care of the robots, ok?
Piccolo+Trunks: Got it!