Dragon Ball: Gender Bent (fanfic)

[Gokuman1993]

I know, what you are going to say: "There is a thread already about this!" Well, I know. I made a thread along time ago about Rule 63 DBZ artwork and my own idea. Well, this one is the same, except it's about a fanfic I am currenty working on (so, no fanart nessecary) It's called "Dragon Ball GB", or "Dragon Ball GB" for short, or "DBGB" for even shorter

Well, consider this one, like my other fanfic "Dark Protector", another DB Multiverse-inspired fanfic. Except this one would be called "Universe 63" (heh, heh. Get it?) Well, basically, it is a retelling of the Dragon Ball story (from the original to Z) where all the main characters (and villians...and certain minor characters) are born of the different gender.

Here, take a read of the first five chapters: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7330012/1/D ... ender_Bent and a link to my gallery based on this fanfic: http://rulkout1993.deviantart.com/gallery/31519489 I think you'll enjoy them Also, here's some bios for the characters so far.... (beware of spoilers!)

Character Bios:

Son Goku (fem!Goku):
Real Name: Son Goku (Earth name), Kaka (Saiyan name, female version of "Kakarot")
Gender: Female
Speices: Saiyan
Age: 12-46
Height: 3'0'' (as a child), 5'3'' (as an adult, but appears shorter)
Weight: 95 lbs (as a child), 120 lbs (as an adult)
Family: Barda (fem!Bardock, mother/deceased), Son Goha (fem!Grandpa Gohan, adoptive grandmother/deceased), Radda (fem!Raditz, eldest sister/deceased), Cho-Cho (male!Chichi, husband), Ox-Queen (fem!Ox-King, mother-in-law), Son Goha (fem!Gohan, eldest daughter), Son Gota (fem!Goten, youngest daughter), Dev* Satan (male!Videl, son-in-law), Son Pan (male!Pan, grandson)
Affiliation: former student of the Turtle School, leader of the Z-Senshi.
Personailty: Kind-hearted, unselfish, adventurous and loves to fight. However, is very naive and, even as an adult, a little childish, but still well-meaning. Also, a very bad cook.
Likes: Fighting, eating, her family and friends, protecting the Earth.
Dislikes: People threaten the things she loves, needles, people with evil intentions.
Powers: Superhuman strength, speed, agility, reflexives and durability. All these powers increase through training.
Forms: Great Ape (formerly), Kaio-Ken (formerly), Super Saiyans 1-3.

Bloomer Briefs (male!Bulma)
Real Mame: Bloomer Briefs.
Gender: Male
Speices: Human
Age: 16-50
Height: 5'6''
Weight: 125 lbs
Family: Dr. Briefs (father), Ms. Briefs (mother), Yamcha (fem!Yamcha, ex-girlfriend), Vegeta (fem!Vegeta, wife), Trunks (fem!Trunks, eldest daughter), Bulla (male!Bra, youngest son), Queen Vega* (fem!King Vegeta, mother-in-law/deceased), Tarba (fem!Tarble, sister-in-law)
Affilation: heir/head of Capsule Corps, ally to the Z-Senshi
Personailty: Arrogant, narssicistic, selfish, impulsive and hotheaded. However, is quite cunning and intelligent. Later grows to be much kinder and less selfish. Also, a bit of a flirt around girls, but would never cheat on his girlfriend (that is until he meets Vegeta....)
Likes: strawberries, talking about himself, inventing.
Dislikes: boys flirting with his girls (ironic, huh?), bad things happening to him, perverts (especially the female kind)
Powers: None.

Miss Roshi (fem!Master Roshi)
Real Name: Muten Roshi
Ailas: Jackie Chun
Gender: Female
Speices: Human
Age: Around 1,000 years old (appears to be in her 70's)
Height: 5'4''
Weight: 156 lbs
Family: Fortuneteller Baba* (eldest sister)
Affilation: Head of the Turtle School, ally to the Z-Senshi
Personailty: Wise, kind-hearted, unselfish and caring like a grandmother. However, her main weaknesses is the company of men (and the need to see one naked or have a nice little touch....anywhere )
Likes: Sexually harrasing men (especially Bloomer), her students succeding and getting stronger, porn (especially Yaoi).
Dislikes: Evil and dishonorable people, not getting what she wants (which is obivous), being called "old"
Powers: Superhuman strength, speed, agility, reflexives and durabilty. These powers increase through training.
Forms: Buff Form (as she increases her ki, her strength and muscles grow 100X fold!)

Well, that's it for now. I hope you enjoy my story

P.S.:
* Help think of a better name for Fem!King Vegeta and Male!Videl! I think what I thought up was lame!
* Is Baba Roshi's older or younger sister?

[Gokuman1993]

Hello? Is anyone there?

[Gokuman1993]

You know, not that anyone seems to care, but here's a new chapter: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7330012/6/D ... ender_Bent

Enjoy And next up, we'll meet...fem!Yamcha!

[SSJ YUSUKE]

Since no one else has commented on this fanfic, I guess I will. I glossed over the first four chapters and noticed that there was no real difference between your story and the original.
The idea of changing all the characters genders is not bad, but maybe instead of them just beign carbon copies of the original characters you could give them new traits and perhaps add things into the story or even change it to make it more original, after all the characters all do have different genders so surely they would be different. Don't fall into the trap of just rewriting the story, be original, come up with new ideas, which you believe would make the story more intresting. The premise has potential but you have to try and be more original.
Thats just me giving some constructive critisism, good luck.

[Gokuman1993]

Since no one else has commented on this fanfic, I guess I will. I glossed over the first four chapters and noticed that there was no real difference between your story and the original.
The idea of changing all the characters genders is not bad, but maybe instead of them just beign carbon copies of the original characters you could give them new traits and perhaps add things into the story or even change it to make it more original, after all the characters all do have different genders so surely they would be different. Don't fall into the trap of just rewriting the story, be original, come up with new ideas, which you believe would make the story more intresting. The premise has potential but you have to try and be more original.
Thats just me giving some constructive critisism, good luck.

Oh, well. Don't worry. I'll make sure to add in more original ideas once the story goes on In fact, I might even change some things (like maybe, the introduction of male!Launch. I'd might turn it into a fight)