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Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Wed Sep 14, 2011 12:53 pm

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/1/

This is a fanfic I decided to write, where Gohan is sent to work under Frieza along with Raditz, Nappa, and Vegeta. I'm curious on your thoughts of the first chapter, specifically how I've written Fri­eza.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by Maphisto86 » Wed Sep 14, 2011 4:42 pm

Iv'e seen a similar story idea done by a few others including BK-81 on Deviantart. It's actually a really good "what if?" scenario since Raditz seemed a lot more interested in Gohan after seeing his tail and noticing his power level was at times far beyond Goku's. Then again he was going to kill his nephew after recieving that super head butt to the chest. Anyway, I will keep my eye on this one. :)
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Fri Sep 16, 2011 5:27 pm

So I'm laying out chapter 3, and what have planned actually makes me kinda watery eyed :cry: . But it's an important moment for Gohan's character.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Mon Sep 19, 2011 6:08 pm

Chapter 3: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/3/Cold_World
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Tue Oct 11, 2011 7:49 pm

I have a request. One of my readers is freaking out because this new character I've introduced apparently has potential to be a Mary Sue and I want to see if there's anything I need to fix or if he's just an odd case:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/7/Cold_World

You only have to read the part at the end below the last grey line.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Fri Oct 14, 2011 6:37 am

I just finished Chapter 3, this story is really good!
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Sat Oct 15, 2011 11:10 am

funrush wrote:I just finished Chapter 3, this story is really good!
Thanks, man! Latest chapter. It's a long one:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/8/
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Mon Oct 17, 2011 4:03 pm

Just got caught up. Arepa's pretty good, I don't particularly like the fact that she's six and she swears so much, though. I laughed so hard at the end when Gohan was drinking! :lol:
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Thu Oct 20, 2011 1:21 pm

New chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/9/Cold_World

WE TIMESKIP NOW.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Thu Oct 20, 2011 3:51 pm

Wow, great chapter. I assume this will be Dodoria's death?
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Thu Oct 20, 2011 8:15 pm

I'd tell you, but then I'd have to kill you.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Thu Oct 20, 2011 9:33 pm

I kinda figured I'd get a response like that. :lol: Can't wait for the chapter!
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Sun Oct 23, 2011 12:44 pm

New chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/10/Cold_World

Shit's gonna get real pretty soon. I'm really excited for the next portion of the story, hence why this one is up so quickly.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Sun Oct 23, 2011 1:50 pm

Who called it? Yeah, so Dodoria's dead, I can't wait to see what happens next.
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Tue Oct 25, 2011 12:28 pm

New chappy:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/11/
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by Gokuman1993 » Tue Oct 25, 2011 3:21 pm

jjgp1112 wrote:New chappy:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/11/
Here's hoping Goku survives...
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Tue Oct 25, 2011 4:06 pm

So... they're going to see Goku! I wonder if he'll join the Saiyans? The fact that Gohan's already at 45,000 is pretty interesting.
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Re: Cold World

Post by jjgp1112 » Thu Oct 27, 2011 12:04 pm

New chapter:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7381507/12/Cold_World

I'm a cliffhanging bastard.
Yamcha: Do you remember the spell to release him - do you know all the words?
Bulma: Of course! I'm not gonna pull a Frieza and screw it up!
Master Roshi: Bulma, I think Frieza failed because he wore too many clothes!
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Re: Cold World

Post by funrush » Thu Oct 27, 2011 4:05 pm

Gohan meets Goku!
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Re: Cold World

Post by coola » Fri Oct 28, 2011 3:21 pm

Looking forward to what will happen next, really great story, i felt really sorry when i read what Freeza and Zarbon did to Gohan, and i hope he will take revenge on them
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