Fanmanga - Dragon Ball New Age

[mAcChaos]

I've just never heard that phrase used before. It's always "beck and call" so it just stood out because it was different.

[Malik_DBNA]

I've just never heard that phrase used before. It's always "beck and call" so it just stood out because it was different.

The more you know... lol

[mAcChaos]

I can't even find it on Google. :V

Anyway, I have the feeling Gohan is going to get destroyed. At least at this rate.

[sangofe]

edited out

[dbzfan7]

I know you said you had this planned out, but what has changed since Gohan last met Aladjinn? He doesn't have a tail so no SSJ4, he didn't get his powers released again so they have to be forced out, and they haven't said what to do with Aladjinn as he can't be killed and Vegeta's body is the one in peril so he'd be possibly killing Vegeta. Gohan is also pretty emotional as that's where his power comes from so that could easily be taken advantage of.

[mAcChaos]

> Gohan is also pretty emotional as that's where his power comes from so that could easily be taken advantage of.
> Aladjinn sees fresh meat
> sends Gohan into emotional tailspin
> SSJ300 unleashed

[Saiga]

Pretty sure "do you proud" is also correct English.

[Kamiccolo9]

Pretty sure "do you proud" is also correct English.

It is.

[TheGmGoken]

I know you said you had this planned out, but what has changed since Gohan last met Aladjinn? He doesn't have a tail so no SSJ4, he didn't get his powers released again so they have to be forced out, and they haven't said what to do with Aladjinn as he can't be killed and Vegeta's body is the one in peril so he'd be possibly killing Vegeta. Gohan is also pretty emotional as that's where his power comes from so that could easily be taken advantage of.

Wait and see

[Malik_DBNA]

I always say I have a method to my madness. Everything is pre-ordained

[dbzfan7]

I always say I have a method to my madness. Everything is pre-ordained

It's driving me nuts how it seems Gohan only got a confidence boost.

[TheGmGoken]

I always say I have a method to my madness. Everything is pre-ordained

It's driving me nuts how it seems Gohan only got a confidence boost.

Man. You're going insane. I don't think he's going to tell you what's going to happen. The suspense is killing you

[Malik_DBNA]

Confidence does wonders for your... uh... confidence...

...

...yeah, I totally lost where i was going with that

[dbzfan7]

Confidence does wonders for your... uh... confidence...

...

...yeah, I totally lost where i was going with that

I don't think confidence is going to be enough.

[Flame Dragon]

I'm loving your work.
I wasn't sure at first, because i throught it was the usual AF-Absalon fanfic comic (with the cliche Freeza-Cell-Buu-Broly resurrections and ten more SSJ transformations) but after the Rigor saga the story is getting really interesting.
I don't like how Vegeta got possessed again, i think it would have interesting if Goku got possessed... But i will see how the story evolves, can't judge the Aladjin Arc if it's not over.

Things I like the Most:
- Kuririn getting some spotlight
- Piccolo training in magic
- Gohan being relevant again (my favourite character )
- Uub being foreshadowed for greatness

I think i already figured out a bit of what you want to do:

Spoiler:

Once Rigor's family gets to Earth, every Z fighter will have a fight with a family member, based on their strenght. Kinda like what One Piece does to make the secondary characters not feel weaklings.

I'm a bit troubled by SSJ5 design... I think i don't like that the Saiyan loses the SSJ4 fur... Makes no sense to me.
Also i think SSJ5 looks too evil, if Goku obtains the form, i hope you draw him in a way to make him look heroic...

Anyway keep up the good work, i really hope Gohan, Piccolo and Oob get to kick some ass again!

[Malik_DBNA]

Thanks for the props and comments

I tried to seperate myself from other doujinshi by not resurrecting Old Villains (seems lazy imo) and not going bonkers with new SSJ forms (I've seen SSJ100 before... My god... The stupid hurts my eyes). Instead, I went with only one new form and evolutions to previous forms.

I had thought of having Son Goku being possessed until I saw the 'Evil Goku' storyline from Dragon Ball EX. Thats why I stayed with Vegeta.

I think you'll like what I do with Saga 3

The Ascended and True SSJ4 forms were originally concepts for SSJ5. I wanted something unique, not just a 'palette swap' or 'reversion' of Toyble's SSJ5. I just couldnt get it to look right with the hair design I did (I tried red fur, black fur... Nothing looked right). I wanted something that was kindof a mix between SSJ and SSJ4, hence why they retain the red fur on the tail and the SSJ4 styled hair and facial features, but no fur like the previous ssj forms.

The black sclera, red eyes, and crimson lightning are unique only to Rigor. If Goku or Vegeta were ever to obtain the form, their aura, eyes, and lightning would be like a normal SSJ4

[Flame Dragon]

Thanks for the props and comments


The black sclera, red eyes, and crimson lightning are unique only to Rigor. If Goku or Vegeta were ever to obtain the form, their aura, eyes, and lightning would be like a normal SSJ4

This makes it sound like Rigor obtained the SSJ5 form in an artificial way. Really interested to see how my theories hold up.

Anyway if you like an idea, like Goku or Oob possession, just do it! You don't have to be unique at all costs, it's more important to have well executed ideas than original ones.

Remember DBGT? Lots of original and fresh ideas, executed like ass.

Do whatever you like with your fanmanga, execution >>> originality.
Just my two cents.

PS: Black Fur with Red Hair SSJ5 (with SSJ3 hairstyle) would have looked sick imho.

[sangofe]

I always say I have a method to my madness. Everything is pre-ordained

Haha, so you don't work like Toriyama, huh ?

[Malik_DBNA]

I always say I have a method to my madness. Everything is pre-ordained

Haha, so you don't work like Toriyama, huh ?

To an extent. I have a very basic idea skeleton of how the story progresses. Everything else is ad lib

[Malik_DBNA]

This makes it sound like Rigor obtained the SSJ5 form in an artificial way. Really interested to see how my theories hold up.

Anyway if you like an idea, like Goku or Oob possession, just do it!

Do whatever you like with your fanmanga, execution >>> originality.
Just my two cents..

Rigor's forms are unique due to being the Legendary Saiyan of the DBNA timeline, not Broly.

Goku being possessed was just a thought. The way things played out with Oob in DBNA was planned. I want Oob to be more than he was in GT. Thats why he's training with Kaiosama. The other reason Goku wasnt possessed was because (up until a few months ago) he was originally going to be the one to defeat Aladjinn.

I am doing what I like hence why I didnt follow some other people's "advice" to basically trash my whole doujinshi and restart from scratch, but almost completely copy off of DB Absalon.