My idea as to how Future Trunks turned out

[RockJohnAxe]

Spaghetti Balls Z
Story dedicated and inspired by: Dr. Machismo
The wind rustled and the clouds shifted. Picchisnose stood atop the look out. He knew trouble had arrived. The tantalizing smell that wafted from this new ultimate enemy, it was too much!

Picchisnose quickly lowered his pants and let loose the Namekian Fart call for Help! He screamed and shivvered as his ass cheeks vibrated at an alarming rate! His ass lit on fire, but that was a sign the Namekian Fart Call was working!

He could sense his allies coming to aid him! Patting out his ass fire he glanced back at the dinner plate that housed the greatest threat ever! The Spaghetti Balls!!

Soon Pooku arrived! His hair was long and he had a beard... because he was a man, and not just any man! A real man... with a beard! He grinned at Picchisnose whos pants were still on the ground. His namekian wang swaying in the wind.

Then Poogeta arrived! He also had a beard but also an eye patch! For Poogeta was now a pirate and lived on an island in the middle of the ocean!

"Long time no see Krapalot!" Poogeta glared at Pooku. His pants bulged with a raging boner.

Then not long after, the others arrived. Poohan, who was now a cat. Pooten and Skunk who were now a happily married couple.

"Zomg! YU GAIZ!" Picchisnose exclaimed as he pointed to the steaming plate over yonder.
"Thar SPaghETTI BALLS!! NEW THREAT!!" Picchisnose was out of breathe and began to pant heavily. His dong continued to wave about as he paniced!

Pooku surveyed this new enemy! "It just looks like a bowl of spaghetti...?" He scratched his head, but then suddenly one of the spaghetti noodles slightly moved. Pooku took off his shirt and started to massage his chest.

"KRAPALOT!! I WILL FACE THIS FOE!!"

"NOOOOO POOGETA!!!"

But it was too late, Poogeta rushed the bowl of spaghetti and swung wildly through the air. He punched and kicked and hit nothing but air.

"TRY PUNCHING DOWNWARDS!" yelled Picchisnose.

"Meow Meow" said Gohan the Cat. Pooten and Skunk started making out.

Pooku twisted his nipples and got angry! "ILL SAVE THE DAY!! RAAHAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH (etc times 100) and Pooku started to glow bright pink!

He rushed the bowl and started to eat the spaghetti balls z! One bite after another, after another. His clothes began to melt because his Super Pink Saiya-jerk powers were too strong for mortal fabric!

"GRRAWWHHH I CAN DO IT!!" Pooku was begining to struggle! The enemy was too much!!

"HERE POOKU!!! THE DIAPER OF MYSTIC BALL POWER!" Picchisnose tossed Pooku the Mystical Diaper. His wang flailed as he threw it.

Pooku finished the last Spaghetti ball and his stomach started to gurgle.

"O NO! screamed Picchisnose "Its POO-LONG THE ULTIMATE BROWN DRAGON!!"

Poo-Long erupted out of Pooku's ass ripping right through the Mystic Diaper and then exploded covered everyone in Shit... because this story is shit.

The End.

[Dr. Machismo]

That is a fucking big boast that I, infact, find rather insulting to Toriyama. I doubt you have the slightest idea what even goes into making a manga or comic book or any form of novel. Also based on how you react to criticism, the internet will tear your soul asunder, ESPECIALLY with a boast like this.

So, me expressing my belief that my fanfiction is as good/better than Toriyama's work ... is "insulting"? Congratulations on blowing yet another post out of proportion, you guys. Here you're accusing of mishandling opinions, but really, it's people like you who don't know how to handle opinions. My comment was nothing to even take offense at. Many fans have expressed disapproval at Toriyama's handling of his work, so it's not wrong to assume that a number of them think they could do the series better than he did. In fact, I've seen fans who do. It's my opinion that I could work on something even better or just as good as what Toriyama came up with. Secondly, you have no way of knowing my experience on writing stories, so you're just making baseless assumptions. And "oddly" enough, you accused me of making assumptions. You're a huge hypocrite.

Thirdly, I respond to my criticism properly, as I went on about in this thread. Regardless of how much you may disagree, there's no reason to think I would let any of the criticism discourage me. Have I let any of these rude comments you guys made discourage me? Nope. And again, you're making assumptions. Hypocrite.

Revision is a good thing. All good stories go through countless revisions. But if the concepts are weak the story will be no matter how many revisions you make.

I'm glad you are playing with some creative ideas and making a fan tribute to a great series, but don't ever claim it to be on the levels of Toriyama again. What arrogance! My god man!

I'm not sure if I should listen to someone who seems to have only worked on a crappy sprite comic on how to handle my own work. I've actually worked on fanfictions before, and received good feedback.

Again, you're making a big deal over nothing. Are you seriously offended by what I said? All I can say is wow. But fans blowing mere opinions out of proportions out of proportions is probably something to expect from a place like this. Still, I don't think finding such egostical, rude, disruptive and baiting posters here was something to expect. When a number of you don't come to an agreement, you can't help but derail threads by making unnecessary and pointless comments about how "fed up" you are. You think you're in the right ... but no, you're really not. You should mature and handle disagreements better.

[Dr. Machismo]

Spaghetti Balls Z
Story dedicated and inspired by: Dr. Machismo
The wind rustled and the clouds shifted. Picchisnose stood atop the look out. He knew trouble had arrived. The tantalizing smell that wafted from this new ultimate enemy, it was too much!

Picchisnose quickly lowered his pants and let loose the Namekian Fart call for Help! He screamed and shivvered as his ass cheeks vibrated at an alarming rate! His ass lit on fire, but that was a sign the Namekian Fart Call was working!

He could sense his allies coming to aid him! Patting out his ass fire he glanced back at the dinner plate that housed the greatest threat ever! The Spaghetti Balls!!

Soon Pooku arrived! His hair was long and he had a beard... because he was a man, and not just any man! A real man... with a beard! He grinned at Picchisnose whos pants were still on the ground. His namekian wang swaying in the wind.

Then Poogeta arrived! He also had a beard but also an eye patch! For Poogeta was now a pirate and lived on an island in the middle of the ocean!

"Long time no see Krapalot!" Poogeta glared at Pooku. His pants bulged with a raging boner.

Then not long after the others arrived. Poohan, who was now a cat. Pooten and Skunk who were now a happily married couple.

"Zomg! YU GAIZ!" Picchisnose exclaimed as he pointed to the steaming plate over yonder.
"Thar SPaghETTI BALLS!! NEW THREAT!!" Picchisnose was out of breathe and began to pant heavily. His dong continued to wave about as he paniced!

Pooku surveyed this new enemy! "It just looks like a bowl of spaghetti...?" He scratched his head, but then suddenly one of the spaghetti noodles slightly moved. Pooku took off his shirt and started to massage his chest.

"KRAPALOT!! I WILL FACE THIS FOE!!"

"NOOOOO POOGETA!!!"

But it was too late, Poogeta rushed the bowl of spaghetti and swung wildly through the air. He punched and kicked and hit nothing but air.

"TRY PUNCHING DOWNWARDS!" yelled Picchisnose.

"Meow Meow" said Gohan the Cat. Pooten and Skunk started making out.

Pooku twisted his nipples and got angry! "ILL SAVE THE DAY!! RAAHAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH (etc times 100) and Pooku started to glow bright pink!

He rushed the bowl and started to eat the spaghetti balls z! One bite after another, after another. His clothes began to melt because his Super Pink Saiya-jerk powers were too strong for mortal fabric!

"GRRAWWHHH I CAN DO IT!!" Pooku was begining to struggle! The enemy was too much!!

"HERE POOKU!!! THE DIAPER OF MYSTIC BALL POWER!" Picchisnose tossed Pooku the Mystical Diaper. His wang flailed as he threw it.

Pooku finished the last Spaghetti ball and his stomach started to gurgle.

"O NO! screamed Picchisnose "Its POO-LONG THE ULTIMATE BROWN DRAGON!!"

Poo-Long erupted out of Pooku's ass ripping right through the Mystic Diaper and then exploded covered everyone in Shit... because this story is shit.

The End.

And this is trolling. Please keep **** like this on 4Chan on IGN Vestibule or some ****.

[RockJohnAxe]

Wahh wahh wahh, always the victim eh Machismo?

So, me expressing my belief that my fanfiction is as good/better than Toriyama's work ... is "insulting"?

If you believe this to be true then you are a fool. Your story is a fan fiction of an already established franchise. How about write something completely original that becomes as popular as even a FRACTION of what Dragon Ball has.

It's my opinion that I could work on something even better or just as good as what Toriyama came up with.

Good luck with that dude. Can't wait too see this master peice!!

you have no way of knowing my experience on writing stories, so you're just making baseless assumptions.

You are 17 years old. You have no professional experience what so ever. I'm not assuming anything, accept what you are. In-experienced.

Regardless of how much you may disagree, there's no reason to think I would let any of the criticism discourage me

Never let criticism discourage you dude, or you wont make it in this world. Criticism should light a fire under your ass and get you excited!

I'm not sure if I should listen to someone who seems to have only worked on a crappy sprite comic on how to handle my own work.

I'm not telling you how to handle your own shit. Grow up dude.

I've actually worked on fanfictions before, and received good feedback.

Good. Let's hope its better than Trunks with a beard who marries Videl. "Good feedback" is very subjective. Your mom might think it's great, but real people have high expectations, so let's hope it is better than Toriyama's work.

you're making a big deal over nothing.

Dude, the things you say are completely absurd! You need a reality check.

Are you seriously offended by what I said?

No because you are the one making yourself look stupid.

egostical

It's definitely like something not too far from what you'd expect from Toriyama! In fact, I'd say it's even BETTER!

The anger you receive from everyone has been self-induced by your poor attitude and un-willingness to listen to others. Stop defnding yourself, no body cares.

[Dr. Machismo]

You really sound like you're just trolling me now. If this was like The Vestibule or some ****, I'd go with the flow and troll back ... but I'm not gonna go that route.

So what if my story is a fanfiction? Doesn't make any worse than what Toriyama could come up with.

Just because you're not a professional writer doesn't make you inexperienced.

And should I really listen to a dude who's posting all these derailing comments on "growing up"? Take your own advice, bro. And yes, you are trying to give me advice on how to write a fanfic. Normally I would accept this advice, but based on your tone and how you worded things, not to mention your other comments, I'm not gonna take it kindly.

By good feedback, I mean other fans. And let's hope it's better than I posted in this thread? LOL! It'll be better than your crappy fancomic, I'll say that much. Think I'm being rude? Just look at your previous post that wasn't contributive in ANY way!

And you are clearly getting offended ... even though there's no need.

[RockJohnAxe]

Nobody cares.

[Dr. Machismo]

Haha, that was actually pretty funny. Maybe I should start responding to rude comments in a HAPPY manner!

How about we get back on topic?

@IAmAwesome: Goku isn't a pun, though. Maybe him killing Cell didn't save his timeline, but him killing the ANdroids ... WHOOLAH! You proved me right! And Gohan was the put the final touches on saving the main timeline in the Cell saga. I'll get to the rest of your post later!

[VegettoEX]

Account warnings issued. I have absolutely no qualms with entirely terminating access for certain users if this continues.

Either be a super-awesome person and follow the rules you agreed to twice prior to registration, or do not post here.

[IAmAwesome]

Account warnings issued. I have absolutely no qualms with entirely terminating access for certain users if this continues.

Either be a super-awesome person and follow the rules you agreed to twice prior to registration, or do not post here.

Really. You make fun of my user name? That's really mature coming from an adult. Just saying. Ya know? Maybe you should be a fusion of Two people Vegetto. Also what rules I agree too? I sighed up and hen it was taking to long to load. Then I press back and re sighn up. THen once I did that IT went to activate account thingy. I saw 0 rules. In fact it's the first time I have not seen rules from a website when I sigh up. Now either your website made a error or you're lying. I'll like to think it just made a error.

I'm not sure if I should listen to someone who seems to have only worked on a crappy sprite comic on how to handle my own work.

To be honest. After seeing your ideas. His comic is better ~ Opinion.

I've actually worked on fanfictions before, and received good feedback.

Didn't you say on that other topic that you only New Age only got good feedback cause not enough people read it. I guess that doesn't imply to you.

Here I'll give you SOME advice on a good sequel fanfic that will only be on DBGT level.
1. Don't say it's good or better than Akira Toriyama's work. You'll get bashed at [iEVERY][/i] mistake possible
2. No new SSJ transformation. Not even SSJ4.
3. Have it short. A good 1 saga will do.
4. Don't change character personalities. Gohan is not a fighter he's a studier. Most likely will slack off again but his Mystic gives him power to fight. So pretty much keep Gohan how he was in the Boo Arc. Him being a teacher will do just fine. Vegeta still wants to beat Goku but now it's a friendly rivalry and respect. He won't bash Goku at everything he does but he'll still make some angry remakrs at him. Such as "You fool". Goten and Trunks date girls and work. They still train but just enough not to get weaker. Everyone else you should know.
5. This going come out and make you say "WTF" but read. Have at least 1 or 2 bullshit plot device. EVERY good story have one.
6. No new transformations. Not to be confused with SSJ. I mean for Humans.
7. Ignore BoG as that is going to make you fuck up.
8. Have a decent villain. A good back story. Not something like Majin Boo who just popped up at random.
9. Have them talk about past experiences such as Freeza.
10. Have that defining moment. For Dragonball it was the fighting. For DBZ it was SSJ. For DBGT it was SSJ4.
11. Make at least 1 or 2 plot holes. Every story needs them. Despite people not wanting them.
12. Break the 4th wall once.
13. Don't plan things out. Just write as you go along.

[Kamiccolo9]

Account warnings issued. I have absolutely no qualms with entirely terminating access for certain users if this continues.

Either be a super-awesome person and follow the rules you agreed to twice prior to registration, or do not post here.

Really. You make fun of my user name? That's really mature coming from an adult. Just saying. Ya know? Maybe you should be a fusion of Two people Vegetto. Also what rules I agree too? I sighed up and hen it was taking to long to load. Then I press back and re sighn up. THen once I did that IT went to activate account thingy. I saw 0 rules. In fact it's the first time I have not seen rules from a website when I sigh up. Now either your website made a error or you're lying. I'll like to think it just made a error.

He says that all the time. He's not making fun of you. Calm down.
You had to agree to the rules when you signed up. We've all done it. I imagine you probably skipped over them.

[IAmAwesome]

Account warnings issued. I have absolutely no qualms with entirely terminating access for certain users if this continues.

Either be a super-awesome person and follow the rules you agreed to twice prior to registration, or do not post here.

Really. You make fun of my user name? That's really mature coming from an adult. Just saying. Ya know? Maybe you should be a fusion of Two people Vegetto. Also what rules I agree too? I sighed up and hen it was taking to long to load. Then I press back and re sighn up. THen once I did that IT went to activate account thingy. I saw 0 rules. In fact it's the first time I have not seen rules from a website when I sigh up. Now either your website made a error or you're lying. I'll like to think it just made a error.

He says that all the time. He's not making fun of you. Calm down.
You had to agree to the rules when you signed up. We've all done it. I imagine you probably skipped over them.

I didn't check a box. I read the rules ALL the time when I sigh up for things. Even a PS3 update terms of services. I didn't get them this time. Must have been an error then.

[TheGmGoken]

Here I'll give you SOME advice on a good sequel fanfic that will only be on DBGT level.
1. Don't say it's good or better than Akira Toriyama's work. You'll get bashed at [iEVERY][/i] mistake possible
2. No new SSJ transformation. Not even SSJ4.
3. Have it short. A good 1 saga will do.
4. Don't change character personalities. Gohan is not a fighter he's a studier. Most likely will slack off again but his Mystic gives him power to fight. So pretty much keep Gohan how he was in the Boo Arc. Him being a teacher will do just fine. Vegeta still wants to beat Goku but now it's a friendly rivalry and respect. He won't bash Goku at everything he does but he'll still make some angry remakrs at him. Such as "You fool". Goten and Trunks date girls and work. They still train but just enough not to get weaker. Everyone else you should know.
5. This going come out and make you say "WTF" but read. Have at least 1 or 2 bullshit plot device. EVERY good story have one.
6. No new transformations. Not to be confused with SSJ. I mean for Humans.
7. Ignore BoG as that is going to make you fuck up.
8. Have a decent villain. A good back story. Not something like Majin Boo who just popped up at random.
9. Have them talk about past experiences such as Freeza.
10. Have that defining moment. For Dragonball it was the fighting. For DBZ it was SSJ. For DBGT it was SSJ4.
11. Make at least 1 or 2 plot holes. Every story needs them. Despite people not wanting them.
12. Break the 4th wall once.
13. Don't plan things out. Just write as you go along.

That was...great. Didn't expect that from you. Good job. Seriously. You just wowed me.

[DynasticHunter]

Here I'll give you SOME advice on a good sequel fanfic that will only be on DBGT level.
1. Don't say it's good or better than Akira Toriyama's work. You'll get bashed at [iEVERY][/i] mistake possible
2. No new SSJ transformation. Not even SSJ4.
3. Have it short. A good 1 saga will do.
4. Don't change character personalities. Gohan is not a fighter he's a studier. Most likely will slack off again but his Mystic gives him power to fight. So pretty much keep Gohan how he was in the Boo Arc. Him being a teacher will do just fine. Vegeta still wants to beat Goku but now it's a friendly rivalry and respect. He won't bash Goku at everything he does but he'll still make some angry remakrs at him. Such as "You fool". Goten and Trunks date girls and work. They still train but just enough not to get weaker. Everyone else you should know.
5. This going come out and make you say "WTF" but read. Have at least 1 or 2 bullshit plot device. EVERY good story have one.
6. No new transformations. Not to be confused with SSJ. I mean for Humans.
7. Ignore BoG as that is going to make you fuck up.
8. Have a decent villain. A good back story. Not something like Majin Boo who just popped up at random.
9. Have them talk about past experiences such as Freeza.
10. Have that defining moment. For Dragonball it was the fighting. For DBZ it was SSJ. For DBGT it was SSJ4.
11. Make at least 1 or 2 plot holes. Every story needs them. Despite people not wanting them.
12. Break the 4th wall once.
13. Don't plan things out. Just write as you go along.

I like the one about breaking the fourth wall. Every DB follow-up needs one.

[Kamiccolo9]

@IAmAwesome: Goku isn't a pun, though. Maybe him killing Cell didn't save his timeline, but him killing the ANdroids ... WHOOLAH! You proved me right! And Gohan was the put the final touches on saving the main timeline in the Cell saga. I'll get to the rest of your post later!

Goku is a pun. It's a play on the Japanese name of the character he is based off of.

Son Goku
The name of the monkey king from the Chinese fantasy novel Journey to the West, which DragonBall is based on to a certain extent. “Son Gokuu” is the Japanese reading of the character’s name, while the Chinese reading is “Sūn Wùkōng”. The 悟/go means roughly to understand or to percieve. More importantly, it's used to write the verb satoru (悟る), from which the name of the Buddhist concept of satori derives. 空 can mean sky, empty, or void. It's the kanji for sora, the Japanese word for sky, which you might be familiar with if you're a Kingdom Hearts fan. When it's read as kara, it means 'empty'. When you put these two characters together, you get the meaning of "Percieving the Void", "Aware of Vacuity", or various other translations. In the story of Journey to the West, the monkey king is given this name by a Buddhist sage who he studies under. For a family name, the sage gives him 孫/Son, meaning “grandchild”, because it’s written with the radical for “monkey”.
Toriyama Explanation: “This name was taken completely from that of the protagonist of Journey to the West. This was because I originally planned on him being an actual monkey.” [DBF]
Source Spelling:: 孫悟空/Sūn Wùkōng (Chinese), Son Gokuu (Japanese)
Name Spelling: 孫悟空 /Son Gokuu

Almost all Dragon Ball characters have puns for names. This is an interesting guide on the topic.
http://www.kanzenshuu.com/forum/viewtop ... =7&t=12853

[Dr. Machismo]

After seeing your more recent posts in this thread, IAmAwesome, it's a lot clearer that you're only 9 years old.

Here I'll give you SOME advice on a good sequel fanfic that will only be on DBGT level.
1. Don't say it's good or better than Akira Toriyama's work. You'll get bashed at [iEVERY][/i] mistake possible
2. No new SSJ transformation. Not even SSJ4.
3. Have it short. A good 1 saga will do.
4. Don't change character personalities. Gohan is not a fighter he's a studier. Most likely will slack off again but his Mystic gives him power to fight. So pretty much keep Gohan how he was in the Boo Arc. Him being a teacher will do just fine. Vegeta still wants to beat Goku but now it's a friendly rivalry and respect. He won't bash Goku at everything he does but he'll still make some angry remakrs at him. Such as "You fool". Goten and Trunks date girls and work. They still train but just enough not to get weaker. Everyone else you should know.
5. This going come out and make you say "WTF" but read. Have at least 1 or 2 bullshit plot device. EVERY good story have one.
6. No new transformations. Not to be confused with SSJ. I mean for Humans.
7. Ignore BoG as that is going to make you fuck up.
8. Have a decent villain. A good back story. Not something like Majin Boo who just popped up at random.
9. Have them talk about past experiences such as Freeza.
10. Have that defining moment. For Dragonball it was the fighting. For DBZ it was SSJ. For DBGT it was SSJ4.
11. Make at least 1 or 2 plot holes. Every story needs them. Despite people not wanting them.
12. Break the 4th wall once.
13. Don't plan things out. Just write as you go along.

1. This has nothing to do with the fanfic itself. I could careless if people started to rage over a simple opinion. If saying that my fanfiction is better or as good as Toriyama's work will get people to bash people, then they should grow up. I'll say what I want about my fanfic.
2. Already ahead of you. I don't see why there should be any more Super Saiyan forms, seeing as going up to Super Saiyan 3 enough. I don't even like the Super Saiyan God.
3. I'm not sure how long mine'll be, but it'll probably not be short. I don't think it'll be super long, but it'll be the right length IMO.
4. Gohan doesn't enjoy fighting, but he still shouldn't slack off after the Buu saga, seeing as he should know where slacking off for 7 years got him. Him choosing to slack off would be an inconsiderate and irresponsible thing to do. Gohan will still train to keep his strength (I'm not sure if I should make Gohan really any stronger than his peak in DBZ though), but not as rigorously as Goku and Vegeta. He'll still be a bookworm and all, but he'll still make time for exercising and staying in shape, similar to how people do in real life. Of course, he'll be training more rigorously than most others seeing as he's not like most others, but again, not as rigorously as Goku and Vegeta. Vegeta will actually care less about fighting Goku, and won't as obsessed with surpassing Goku. He will still care to an extent as it's in his nature, but he won't be as obsessive about it. His personality will be more like how he was in the Saiyan saga (not evil though of course): a calm, collected and exceptionally smart when it comes to fighting. He won't be easily aggravated either. Goten and Trunks will still slack off initially, as that's keeping them in character with how they were at the end of the manga. However, they will eventually regain their fighting spirits later in the story. They should, as they become masters of a swordsmen school in Dragonball Online.
5. Not sure what you mean by "BS plot device". There will still be plot devices though.
6. I don't have any plans for humans transforming ... but we'll see. I think that could work out if done right. I haven't played with that idea yet, though.
7. Nope, although I might see what you mean. I think I can still make the story work and acknowledge the events in that movie at the same time.
8. OK? These are basics lol
9. Um, OK?
10. You have some simple ideas of a "defining moments". One thing that will define the story is Uub, as it'll largely focus on Uub being Goku's successor and Uub surpassing Goku.
11. ... no. Oh, FUCK no. Plotholes are not a good thing.
12. OK?
13. Naw, I'll plan things out, but the final version probably won't be completely like the original plan.

But this is ENTIRELY off topic. Post in my "Dragonball: The Story Continues" thread if you want to talk about my Dragonball manga followup idea.

[KentalSSJ6]

Why am I getting the feeling this will be Absalon all over again?

[Dr. Machismo]

Why am I getting the feeling this will be Absalon all over again?

Don't worry, it's not. I posted details about my fanfiction in my Dragonball: The Story Continues thread.

And don't get too excited about my fanfiction. Not that it won't be good ... but because it's probably not gonna come for a loong time. But let's get back on topic.

@Kamiccolo: Son Goku is not a pun. It's the Japanese translation for Sun Wukong.