Vegito Explains Zamasu's Flaw [Fandub]

[TheUltimateVegito]

Here's my fandub of the scene:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EuuARwaX_YI

Constructive feedback would be appreciated.

[TheUltimateNinja]

Vegetto doesn't sound like that, also he should have a dual-voice.

[Fionordequester]

Vegetto doesn't sound like that, also he should have a dual-voice.

Vegetto shouldn't "sound" like anything; just like none of the Z characters should sound like anything. Different actors have different voices and different takes; the guy doesn't need to be pidgeon-holed into one category.

As for the performance itself, you've definitely got "confident" down, but I'd quicken up the pace of some of those lines deliveries. Vegetto just scored a triumphant blow, and he's really excited to see that Zamasu is most definitely not invincible. So instead of

"Huuuuh [drawn out]? Are you in paaain [drawn out]? Aren't you supposed to be immortal?"

I'd say it more like...

"Huh? Are you in pain? Aren't you supposed to be IMMORTAL?!" [maybe add in a "heh" between "pain" and "Aren't you supposed to be..." if that ends up making the line read too short to fit into all the mouth flaps]

For reference, here's a brief example of what I'm talking about:

What, clown?! Are you feeling angry, humiliated IS THAT IT?!

Notice how there's very little space between "angry", "humiliated", and "is that it"; that's because he's steadily getting more excited in his delivery. I would deliver the line more like that. Similarly, I believe Vegetto's last line is awkwardly written, and keeps you from being able to emote like you should. So I would change it from...

"You ain't immortal anymore, and won't be able to erase all mortals."

When I believe it should sound more like...

"You ain't immortal anymore; you won't be 'exterminating' ANYTHING!" [notice how the line still has the same amount of syllable as the previous]

With the italics being lines that you'll want to break out of your default voice for, and with the CAPS being what you'll want to yell. That's how I believe the line inflections should be.

[TheUltimateNinja]

Vegetto doesn't sound like that, also he should have a dual-voice.

Vegetto shouldn't "sound" like anything; just like none of the Z characters should sound like anything. Different actors have different voices and different takes; the guy doesn't need to be pidgeon-holed into one category.

Vegetto doesn't speak like that.

[Fionordequester]

Vegetto doesn't speak like that.

You're talking about the subs? Or are you talking about how UltimateVegito is speaking?

[TheUltimateNinja]

Vegetto doesn't speak like that.

You're talking about the subs? Or are you talking about how UltimateVegito is speaking?

A bit of both, but mainly the latter. It's too slow and seems a bit too serious for his character.

[Fionordequester]

A bit of both, but mainly the latter. It's too slow and seems a bit too serious for his character.

It is too slow for this specific scene, I agree. Serious though...eh, I got more "calm and cocky" myself.

As for the lack of a voice filter (someone else brought this up), me and Diana (Diana's doing the Multiverse Audio Drama) decided that we'd go without it. One of the main plot points of the "U16 Special" novelization was that Vegetto was his own person; he got sick of trying to be Goku AND Vegeta at the same time, for both his families. So everyone had to accept the fact that he was neither of those people; he was his own person.

UltimateVegito was already cast as Vegetto in the audio drama, so that's probably why he isn't worrying about that. A lot of his recent practice is likely him trying to get ready for when we finally release it.

[TheUltimateVegito]

Vegetto doesn't sound like that, also he should have a dual-voice.

Vegetto shouldn't "sound" like anything; just like none of the Z characters should sound like anything. Different actors have different voices and different takes; the guy doesn't need to be pidgeon-holed into one category.

As for the performance itself, you've definitely got "confident" down, but I'd quicken up the pace of some of those lines deliveries. Vegetto just scored a triumphant blow, and he's really excited to see that Zamasu is most definitely not invincible. So instead of

"Huuuuh [drawn out]? Are you in paaain [drawn out]? Aren't you supposed to be immortal?"

I'd say it more like...

"Huh? Are you in pain? Aren't you supposed to be IMMORTAL?!" [maybe add in a "heh" between "pain" and "Aren't you supposed to be..." if that ends up making the line read too short to fit into all the mouth flaps]

For reference, here's a brief example of what I'm talking about:

What, clown?! Are you feeling angry, humiliated IS THAT IT?!

Notice how there's very little space between "angry", "humiliated", and "is that it"; that's because he's steadily getting more excited in his delivery. I would deliver the line more like that. Similarly, I believe Vegetto's last line is awkwardly written, and keeps you from being able to emote like you should. So I would change it from...

"You ain't immortal anymore, and won't be able to erase all mortals."

When I believe it should sound more like...

"You ain't immortal anymore; you won't be 'exterminating' ANYTHING!" [notice how the line still has the same amount of syllable as the previous]

With the italics being lines that you'll want to break out of your default voice for, and with the CAPS being what you'll want to yell. That's how I believe the line inflections should be.

Thanks for this really good and thorough feedback. I may do a Redub with all this in mind someday.

[Jinzoningen MULE]

"You ain't immortal anymore, and won't be able to erase all mortals."

When I believe it should sound more like...

"You ain't immortal anymore; you won't be 'exterminating' ANYTHING!"

That particular example wouldn't work. Vegetto was referring to the fact that Zamasu's body was "tainted" by the body of a human; Son Goku's, to be specific. Because of that, he could never truly destroy all humans, Son Goku would always remain.

Good advice, otherwise.