Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)

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Re: Dragonball Timestream (Group Writing Project)

Post by FoolsGil » Sat Jan 30, 2016 6:56 pm

Now with Timeline 10 plotted out, I want to bring out my thoughts on the further techniques and abilities of T10.

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FoolsGil wrote:Now with Timeline 10 plotted out, I want to bring out my thoughts on the further techniques and abilities of T10.

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jcogginsa wrote:
Alright. Sounds good to me.

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jcogginsa wrote:

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Post by FoolsGil » Sat Jan 30, 2016 11:15 pm

jcogginsa wrote:
He could teach it, but Yajirobe doesn't like risking his neck protecting Earth.

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Post by jcogginsa » Sat Jan 30, 2016 11:20 pm

He doesn't like it, but he doesn't always get what he wants XD

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On a different note, would anyone mind if I made Uub a bit younger than normal, so that he's closer to Pan's age?

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Post by jcogginsa » Sat Jan 30, 2016 11:52 pm

Scene 11

-The Timeline 16 characters arrive, and headbands are Given to Uub, Pan, Vegeta, and Nova. Pan looks around enthuesiastically, and spots Tullece of Universe 13. She asks if that's her grandpa, but Vegeta states that it's actually an old enemy of Goku named Tullece. Uub point out that he staring and three other people, the other fighters from his universe. And one of them is Rildo. Vegeta scoffs and says by this point all four of them can handle Rildo

"There you go," Whis said, after giving out headbands bearing the number 16 to the latest group.

"Wowwee!" One of the combatants marveled as she scanned the crowd. She was a young girl, around twelve. She wore a loose fitting red Kame Gi, and had an orange neckerchief around her neck. She was the daughter on Son Gohan, Son Pan.

"Be careful Pan," warned the boy next to her, who was around fourteen dressed in a teal Kame Gi. Aside from it's color, his gi differed from hers in two other respects. One was that his had a belt, whereas hers did not. The other was that his gi bore the Kanji of his sensei, Son Goku. Meanwhile, her gi bore the Kanji of the planet Earth. He was Uub, the reincarnation of Buu. "There are a lotta of strong Auras here, and they aren't all good guys. One of them might try something sneaky."

"Don't worry yourself," said the third of their combatants, the former Saiyan prince Vegeta. This Vegeta wore human clothing, in this case a pair of blue jeans, rawhide boots, a black tank top, a denim halfjacket, and fingerless gloves. This Vegeta also bore a mustache. "You and Pan are both strong warriors. You can take care of yourself," Vegeta finished.

The final combatant in their group was a draconian man with purple skin, covered nearly head to toe in natural golden armor. Behind him floated 6 Dragonballs, the seventh embedded in his body

"Hey, look at that guy!" Pan called out, pointing at a man in black Saiyan armor. "He looks just like Grandpa did before he got old and wrinkly!"

It was true, he bore a remarkable resemblance to the Saiyan Son Goku. However, there noticeable differences. This man's muscles were far bulkier than Goku's, and his skin was pale, almost ashen grey.

"That's one of our old enemies," Gohan said, "His name is Tullece. He's a Saiyan pirate who sucks planet's dry with a special tree known as the tree of might."

"I don't think he noticed us," Uub said to Pan, "but he does keep look in different directions every few seconds."

"Huh, you're right," Pan said. She craned her neck to try and see where Tullece was looking. She saw a tall man with teal skin and orange hair.

"That's Bojack," Vegeta replied, "A warrior from the distant past who went on a rampage years ago. He was slain by your father, Pan."

"Really? That's so cool daddy!" Pan said happily.

"Aw, it was nothing," Gohan said, rubbing the back of his head.

"So, who's that?" Uub said, pointing to another figure that Tullece was watching. He was a tall Namekian with a broad, powerful chin.

"That's Lord Slug," Gohan informed them, "Years ago he tried to freeze the planet Earth solid, so his men could live on it. Never did find out why a Namekian liked the cold so much."

"He was looking in three places, meaning there's one more..." Uub figured, as both he an Pan scanned the crowd. They found him at the same time, and he was a figure that they both recognized.

General Rildo, commander of the machine mutants.

Uub gulped.

"Have you forgotten what I told you earlier?" Vegeta said, "You're both powerful. Any one of us could go up against him and defeat him without any problems."

"Yeah, you're right!" Pan said with a laugh, "That doofus is no match for us!"

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Post by FoolsGil » Sun Jan 31, 2016 12:03 am

jcogginsa wrote:He doesn't like it, but he doesn't always get what he wants XD
On a different note, would anyone mind if I made Uub a bit younger than normal, so that he's closer to Pan's age?
Sounds fine.

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Post by jcogginsa » Sun Jan 31, 2016 12:09 am

Fair enough.

Opinions on Scene 11?

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Post by FoolsGil » Sun Jan 31, 2016 12:18 am

Scene 11 works. It looks good. I'll grab scene 8.

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Post by jcogginsa » Sun Jan 31, 2016 12:24 am

Cool. Then I'll handle scene 9

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Post by jcogginsa » Tue Feb 02, 2016 1:21 pm

So, while I wait until I have time to write the scene, I thought I'd kick around a few ideas for character redesigns. Note that none of these are final, they are just concepts

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FoolsGil wrote:

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Post by ShadowBardock89 » Tue Feb 02, 2016 11:39 pm

jcogginsa wrote:
http://www.kanzenshuu.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=11&t=40715&start=20#p1439892
http://dba.bn-ent.net/character/barduck.html
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