DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by CaBrPi » Sat Feb 02, 2013 1:49 pm

Kaboom wrote:
CaBrPi wrote:One problem: would Goku really know what "escort" means? :P
Like, it does stick out, but I'm not sure if "guidin'," would have the same connotations you're going for.
I figure it's a common enough word that Goku would learn it from context eventually. At the very least, it's the kind of word Chi-Chi would probably use pretty often.
I mean, I can get behind. It just seemed odd at first.

As for "alright" vs. "all right"... http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictiona ... 1359827282

So they're both correct. I personally use "alright" in the context of, say, "Alright, let's go," and "all right" in "It's all right". But maybe that's weird.

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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Gyt Kaliba » Sat Feb 02, 2013 10:33 pm

Kaboom wrote:Hmm... Good thing the first five chapters or so are all due to be almost completely rewritten soon.
Gah, how many times am I gonna have to re-download this fanfiction. :P Are the rewritings simply because of things you already want to fix, or is it more of a 'depending on what Battle of Gods may or nay not unveil for me to work with' thing?
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Saiga » Sat Feb 02, 2013 11:57 pm

Well, I don't think I'll ever understand all right vs alright. What about already vs all ready?
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by CaBrPi » Sun Feb 03, 2013 12:07 am

Saiga wrote:Well, I don't think I'll ever understand all right vs alright. What about already vs all ready?
"Alright" and "all right" are both correct.

"Already" means something that has happened prior to a specific time ("He was already there", "He will have already been there", etc.), or as what it called an intensive ("Will you just get here, already?").

"All ready" is two separate words that, when combined, imply being completely ready ("Are you all ready to go?").

But enough with the grammar lessons, let's all hound Kaboom to hurry and finish.

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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Kaboom » Sun Feb 03, 2013 2:24 am

Gyt Kaliba wrote:Gah, how many times am I gonna have to re-download this fanfiction. :P Are the rewritings simply because of things you already want to fix, or is it more of a 'depending on what Battle of Gods may or nay not unveil for me to work with' thing?
99% is just a whole lot of the former, and the remaining 1% remains for anything the latter has a slim chance of changing about those early chapters. SO FAR, the only thing Battle of Gods already has potential to change is Gohan's Super Saiyan status. Beyond that, not much. I'm still holding off until after the movie to work on those rewrites either way, just to be safe.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Saiga » Sun Feb 03, 2013 3:29 am

Y'mean, if they give a reason for his Super Saiyan status in BoG you'll incorporate that, and if they don't you'll just be like "Well fuck you BoG, I'll just ignore you"?

Because you could easily just go with the latter regardless of what happens in BoG. Do iiiiiiiiit.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Kaboom » Sun Feb 03, 2013 11:16 am

If Battle of Gods does give a reason for Gohan's regained Super Saiyan, then yeah, I'll easily be able to incorporate it. If not, then I'll just go with the reason I already had planned, and the only difference will be that it doesn't come as a surprise to the other characters.

The one thing that could make a big difference is if Battle of Gods actually makes Gohan significantly weaker overall somehow, like if Birusu really does have time-manipulation powers and rolls him back to his early Boo-arc self or something. THAT could wreak some serious havoc with later parts of GTR's story as planned.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Gyt Kaliba » Sun Feb 03, 2013 12:45 pm

Ahh, all right. I can totally understand that. I mean, that's why I'm dragging my feet in the planning stages of a fanfic of my own, is because I really want to know what's gonna happen in Battle of Gods first, to know what parts of what I already have planned are gonna need massive revision already. With the movie coming out in March, I may as well wait and see what I learn from that point forward.

Anything new we get after that, I'll likely just have to ignore it though, unless it's just so awesome that I have to retcon something.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Kaboom » Mon Feb 11, 2013 1:46 am

Alright! Here's that artwork I mentioned!

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You all feel free to go ahead and make that your desktop backgrounds or something. By the way, this artwork actually contains a minor clue/spoiler for Chapter 17. If you've got any guesses, either keep them to yourselves or just PM me or something.

Hey, lookit that. I actually cranked something out in a timely manner as promised! Maybe this chapter will be done in the next few days, after all. Keep your fingers crossed, but keep those hands raised and the genki coming. If I do get it done and posted by Valentine's Day, though, the artwork and other supplementary goodies will have to wait until a few days after, like last time.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Insertclevername » Mon Feb 11, 2013 2:04 am

I like it! Definitely love the color scheme and design. It has a cool trendy atmosphere to it. Reminds me of an album cover or something. (GT cover band? lol)

I like how your art still keeps alive a lot of the same atmosphere from GT. I can't quite articulate this into words, but GT has this sort of look to it. Not really dark either. Nonetheless, I feel you capture a lot of why I'm so attracted to GT, visually speaking that is. However you do modernize it and give it a nice dose of your personal art style, which is always cool. 8)

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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Saiga » Mon Feb 11, 2013 2:18 am

Pan looks awesome there, but also older than I would have thought. Does GTR follow the Japanese version or the dub in the time it's set (5 or 10 years) after Z?
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Kaboom » Mon Feb 11, 2013 2:25 am

Saiga wrote:Pan looks awesome there, but also older than I would have thought. Does GTR follow the Japanese version or the dub in the time it's set (5 or 10 years) after Z?
The latter, mostly. It starts with the 31st World Tournament, exactly 9 years after Goku took off with Oob at the 28th. So Pan is 13 at the onset and still so presently in the story. I once juggled the ideas, but it's just too fun to write her and Bra as not-so-typical teenage girls.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Saiga » Mon Feb 11, 2013 3:33 am

Kaboom wrote:
Saiga wrote:Pan looks awesome there, but also older than I would have thought. Does GTR follow the Japanese version or the dub in the time it's set (5 or 10 years) after Z?
The latter, mostly. It starts with the 31st World Tournament, exactly 9 years after Goku took off with Oob at the 28th. So Pan is 13 at the onset and still so presently in the story. I once juggled the ideas, but it's just too fun to write her and Bra as not-so-typical teenage girls.
Wouldn't that make her 14? I thought she was only 4 in the funi dub, and 5 in the Japanese version of the 28th Budokai.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by TheDevilsCorpse » Mon Feb 11, 2013 4:45 am

Saiga wrote:Wouldn't that make her 14? I thought she was only 4 in the funi dub, and 5 in the Japanese version of the 28th Budokai.
No, she should turn 5 sometime that same year, but she is still said to be 4 in the Japanese version at the 28th Budokai.

So, so long as Kaboom has her turn 14 before the end of the current AGE and didn't already write a birthday where she turned 13, everything is fine.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Saiga » Mon Feb 11, 2013 5:54 am

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Saiga wrote:Wouldn't that make her 14? I thought she was only 4 in the funi dub, and 5 in the Japanese version of the 28th Budokai.
No, she should turn 5 sometime that same year, but she is still said to be 4 in the Japanese version at the 28th Budokai.

So, so long as Kaboom has her turn 14 before the end of the current AGE and didn't already write a birthday where she turned 13, everything is fine.
Why do I still let the Dragon Ball wiki lead me astray!? Thanks for clearing that up.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Scarz » Mon Feb 11, 2013 9:51 am

It's so beautiful! I set it as my wallpaper for my android phone but I can only make it wide enough for Goku, Pan, and Trunks, not Gill. But hell, I'm not complaining.

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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Gyt Kaliba » Mon Feb 11, 2013 4:36 pm

Great work as usual, I'm loving the Pan re-design (though I never had a problem with her actual design either), this gets me pumped up for that next chapter.

Hmm...did you tinker with Giru's design a bit? He looks less...short...or something. Less ball-like. Maybe it's just me.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Insertclevername » Mon Feb 11, 2013 4:53 pm

I'd say sort of thinner if you ask me.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by Kaboom » Mon Feb 11, 2013 5:08 pm

I'm not sure, maybe he does tend to look less round when I draw him. I often don't think twice when I do since he's got such a simple design, so perhaps subtle differences have crept their way in.
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Re: DragonBall GT Revised [fanfic]

Post by dbzfan7 » Fri Feb 22, 2013 2:28 am

So is Super Saiyan God gonna effect the story. Ultimate Gohan may not get an explanation so it won't change anything, but SSJG is now apparently real and could be either 1 time or forever.
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