Dragon Ball RN (New Fan Manga)

SatoSky · Post by **SatoSky** » Sun Mar 09, 2008 5:18 pm

I read/viewed the first chapter last night and didn't hate it. It wasn't particularly great, but it wasn't too bad either. Maybe I liked it because I was very drunk.

I'll read the other chapters when I'm sober, whenever that may be.

Post by **desirecampbell** » Sun Mar 09, 2008 5:20 pm

Captain Awesome wrote:Toyble may trace some things, but his manga still maintains the feel and atmosphere of Dragonball.
This feels like a completely different entity to me.
A boring one.

Seconded.

Metalwario64 · Post by **Metalwario64** » Sun Mar 09, 2008 9:01 pm

Saiyans being able to "revive themselves?" I smell failage here guys! And even if they could "revive themselves," why would that be a problem for Goku, Vegeta, and Gohan?

Remix · Post by **Remix** » Sun Mar 09, 2008 10:03 pm

Upon just now noticing the DB:AF comic, I have come to the conclusion that RN sucks copious amounts of ass.

In my eyes, Toyble's comic has restarted Dragonball. I've never read a fan comic that felt this spot-on. Ever. Despite the years of bullshit, the comic has made AF into reality for me. I can't wait to see more.

veshira · Post by **veshira** » Sun Mar 09, 2008 10:20 pm

Gaaaah... FIRST HE GETS A MUSTACHE AND A FRO, NOW HE'S FAT! WTF MAN?! HOW COME PEOPLE HAVE TO FUCK WITH A PERFECTLY AWESOME CHARACTER!

I feel like I'm going to cry.

No, seriously, it's cool. xD

Although some of the characters have been nailed down pretty well (there are exceptions), the way the story's progressing stale. Like, Gohan automatically assumes that something bad has happened to Videl because she isn't home? She has legs and she's probably bored shitless in the house all day, why not pick up some Maxi pads with Chichi? (Chichi wasn't there anyway. In fact, where is Chichi? And Bra, no one's worried about Chichi or Bra!)

Another thing is that I don't like the lack of variety with the angles. The fact that it's not Dragon Ball like at all doesn't bother me, but the fact that most panels have the same angle bothers me to no end.

I will say that the coloring sexy as hell, and I love it! Other effects with the art are also sexy. And, I loved the angle used for Roshi's nurse, as well as the nurse and her personality. Oh, and when Raditz appeared in that last panel... huaaaah. I had a fan moment. And I'm not even a Raditz fan. xD

Lots of characters seem to be thrown away, though. Like, what happened to the nurse, Chichi, Bra, Pan, and Yamcha. Weren't they just there? Where'd they go! Aren't they (not including the nurse) somewhat important?

Snail · Post by **Snail** » Sun Mar 09, 2008 11:33 pm

veshira wrote: Like, Gohan automatically assumes that something bad has happened to Videl because she isn't home?

My thoughts exactly. XD

Big Momma · Post by **Big Momma** » Mon Mar 10, 2008 8:24 pm

Haha, when Bulma asked Trunks if he wanted to ask Vegeta to come, he said "Fat chance". lololollol!!!1111!!1 Man...old age has made Vegeta a real douche'.

Also, I noticed how the company is called "Satan Enterprises", but he is still referred to as Her-cule....hmmm....

And if you want to be all technical...this happens after GT, right? So Boo shouldn't really be there...

Overall...I think its okay, the coloring is excellent, but the art itself needs some work.

I prefer Toyble's better.

But to be honest, I think a little comic "Adventurer" deserves a look. XD

Snail · Post by **Snail** » Mon Mar 10, 2008 8:54 pm

Big Momma wrote:
Also, I noticed how the company is called "Satan Enterprises", but he is still referred to as Mr. Satan....hmmm....

Her- cule (damn filter) XD Now I see what may have happened in your post.

Big Momma · Post by **Big Momma** » Mon Mar 10, 2008 9:35 pm

Snail wrote:
Big Momma wrote:
Also, I noticed how the company is called "Satan Enterprises", but he is still referred to as Mr. Satan....hmmm....

Her- cule (damn filter) XD Now I see what may have happened in your post.

Man, I completely forgot about that.

testing223 · Post by **testing223** » Tue Mar 11, 2008 3:00 am

Sebastian (SB) wrote:I think there should be a limit to these "fan-made" manga topics, but hey that's just me.

DBZ is all but dead; soon there won't even be fan mangas to create topics about.

The board isn't exactly a rapid 100-threads a day place, I hardly think beating AWAY topics is the way to go...

Aremke · Post by **Aremke** » Tue Mar 11, 2008 3:37 am

Hm the art's good in some places and ok in others. I don't have any room to talk since my art is pretty rough especially early on. Still, I'd love to see Elsewhere colored half as well as that.

Post by **desirecampbell** » Tue Mar 11, 2008 8:46 am

Aremke wrote:Hm the art's good in some places and ok in others. I don't have any room to talk since my art is pretty rough especially early on. Still, I'd love to see Elsewhere colored half as well as that.

Colour is nice, linework can always be cleaned up further - but good story, pacing, characterization, and dialog is key. You sir, have that in spades.

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testing223 wrote:
Sebastian (SB) wrote:I think there should be a limit to these "fan-made" manga topics, but hey that's just me.
DBZ is all but dead; soon there won't even be fan mangas to create topics about.
The board isn't exactly a rapid 100-threads a day place, I hardly think beating AWAY topics is the way to go...

Quantity doesn't equal quality. A few good DaizEX threads are better than the whole of GameFAQs.

Aremke · Post by **Aremke** » Wed Mar 12, 2008 8:19 am

desirecampbell wrote:
Aremke wrote:Hm the art's good in some places and ok in others. I don't have any room to talk since my art is pretty rough especially early on. Still, I'd love to see Elsewhere colored half as well as that.

desirecambell wrote:Colour is nice, linework can always be cleaned up further - but good story, pacing, characterization, and dialog is key. You sir, have that in spades.

Ah Desire, I can always count on you for support. Thank you

Incidentally, it does make me curious how may people on this board know about/read Elsewhere or even like it. I know we're not supposed to plug our stuff, so I just let my signature speak for me. *hides*

Captain Awesome · Post by **Captain Awesome** » Wed Mar 12, 2008 8:35 am

Aremke wrote: Incidentally, it does make me curious how may people on this board know about/read Elsewhere or even like it. I know we're not supposed to plug our stuff, so I just let my signature speak for me. *hides*

I started reading it yesterday, and I'm really enjoying it, as much as I enjoy Toyble's work, it's really refreshing to read something that is a little different.

Keep up the good work.

SonEric84 · Post by **SonEric84** » Wed Mar 12, 2008 9:35 am

Aremke wrote:
desirecampbell wrote:
Aremke wrote:Hm the art's good in some places and ok in others. I don't have any room to talk since my art is pretty rough especially early on. Still, I'd love to see Elsewhere colored half as well as that.

desirecambell wrote:Colour is nice, linework can always be cleaned up further - but good story, pacing, characterization, and dialog is key. You sir, have that in spades.
Ah Desire, I can always count on you for support. Thank you

Incidentally, it does make me curious how may people on this board know about/read Elsewhere or even like it. I know we're not supposed to plug our stuff, so I just let my signature speak for me. *hides*

I'm not sure if I told you already, but I read your comic and I think it's awesome. I look forward to seeing more.

disturbed001 · Post by **disturbed001** » Wed Mar 12, 2008 5:32 pm

Does RN actually stand for Read Now? Thats ridiculous.

That better?

testing223 · Post by **testing223** » Wed Mar 12, 2008 8:05 pm

disturbed001 wrote:Does RN actually stand for Read Now? Thats ridiculous.

Does ridiculous stand for ridiculous?

Post by **desirecampbell** » Wed Mar 12, 2008 8:10 pm

testing223 wrote:
disturbed001 wrote:Does RN actually stand for Read Now? Thats ridiculous.
Does ridiculous stand for ridiculous?

ridiculous doesn't stand for anything! He gets things done! Everything he does requires exclamation marks!

mysteriousdbzgt · Post by **mysteriousdbzgt** » Thu Mar 13, 2008 2:53 pm

I really don't like this fanfiction. End of story....

eienmic · Post by **eienmic** » Fri Mar 14, 2008 12:15 am

It's a nice try but the art just doesn't cut it for me (the coloring is OK though).

"Its compleatly in color and liscened, plus its FREE."

So, is like Toyble's stuff not FREE? And if I started selling merchandise for RN would it be OK because it's "liscened?" Like compleatly liscened?

Come on people, these red lines under mis-spelled words are there for a reason.